Pogo and Spooky

Anyone noticed?

The rash of stories being moved to other categories? Swingerjoe has been reporting stories to the site as being in the wrong category in retaliation for tho authors deleting his comments. Carvohi gets moved to essays, Vandemonium1 gets his story pulled for "format errors," Imhapless gets moved to non-con. Better be careful, Todd172, don't piss Swingerjoe off. He'll whine to the moderators and get your story moved.

Good story, by the way. 4 stars.

As always

Another fully-engaging and entertaining read. You always leave me wanting to read more, which I suppose is the ultimate compliment. No one here is better when it comes to creating fully-fleshed and interesting characters. Very well done.

Oh, and anony, you're an idiot.

Excellent!

"Just outta college but smarter than you and me put together."

"Doesn't have to be too bright then."

I just loved those lines!

I haven't noticed any stories being MOVED, I know some writers are posting in other categories.

What a nice day.

Very good job. You're stories are always entertaining and I seem to be getting used to your style. I did notice that Imhapless' story got moved to non-consent this morning. Wondered about that, but there are several nice stories today, this being one of them. Looking forward to your next.

At some point, you're going to wise up and start collaborating with a graphic cartoonist and like Frank Miller's Sin City series make a ton of money. Thanks for another great story.

Randi she moved the story to raise the score in a different category.

Excellent

Very good story telling.
5* again

Please keep posting

Loving the back stories

Please keep em coming. Thoroughly enjoying these characters and your writing style.

5/5

Okay, I guess

It wasn't disgusting or gross. It might work as a stream of consciousness exercise in a creative writing class, but it reads like a series of comic book panels, written by someone on an acid trip. Maybe that graphic art thing another commentator mentioned is your bag. Just one example, out of bunches: "A small voice, more timid than she'd ever used, I think." It isn't even a sentence, let alone a paragraph. Sorry, I think you have talent, but I can't like writing like that. I don't want to troll you, so I'll leave you alone. I won't comment or read any more. You seem like a nice guy.

Another great story.

It is a good day on Lit when I see that you have posted a new story.

Very good read. A few minor mistakes but nothing to take away from the story. As usual, excellent pacing and good flow to the tale. 5 stars again.

I'm enjoying learning about all the characters from the bar. It seems like you are building a foundation with these back stories. Maybe we could be looking forward to a saga involving these characters?

Thank you for writing and looking forward to your next story.

Great story line

I love you monster series! It reminds me of a friend of mine! He was a spooky guy who's heart was tamed by a younger woman.

enjoy your stories thanks 5

A real treat

Some of the most creative and unique story lines I've had the pleasure to read on Literotica. And so damn minimal - great impact. 5 stars plus. Thanks

5 *'s again.

5*'s again Todd. Excellent sequel to the Shameless & Monster series, fleshing out another interesting character.

Eight superlative stories right out of the box, in the most difficult and contentious category in Literotica. It's a little hard to believe that you're truly a newby, but no reveals please as it feeds the fantasy that any of us might do as well.

Keep it up, I really appreciate your efforts!

SM

Super!

Hope you have more and thanks for sharing.

@ randi's comment

"Very good job. You're stories are always entertaining and...."

I guess the "team" must have taken the day off. And the beta readers too.

An English teacher, huh?

An excellent trilogy...

An excellent trilogy...I liked this one very much too...Thank you...4*

Thanks for the Feedback!

I appreciate the feedback, it helps. I've got another one posting in the next couple days. I want to get it out while I had time.
Everybody: Thanks for the encouragement, and I'm glad you enjoy them.
Kimmi1990: Sorry you don't enjoy the style... but I have to tell you, if I ever get this published I would like to use your endorsement: "reads like a series of comic book panels, written by someone on an acid trip". That just sounds cool. I'm sure that alone would sell a few copies. No acid, but there are a couple empty bottles of port sitting around now. Still, seriously, thanks for the comments.

Okay, maybe a little harsh

You are a good guy. Hey, you know how it is; we like what we like.

@anonymous re: randi's comment. Swingerjoe, everyone knows it's you. Your little one-sided war against Randi is hilarious. How jealous are you, dude? You're like, obsessive or something. Haven't you noticed that she never responds? She doesn't care. Well, really, no one cares, because you don't matter.

Follow Oshaw's advice !

You really do have a wonderfully lucrative future if you hook up with the correct illustrator ( or do they call themselves inkers) .
I would get all of your stories and characters copywrited' or however that works , and then I'd get in touch with Stan Lee , or someone else in that business , get your works out there , and then get movies made !
Then ,I can brag to all my friends that I was the first one to suggest that you put your stories in Graphic novel style ! I'm selfish that way , lol.
Then I'll have to explain how the Crkcppr' moniker came to be , and they'll not believe me ! Lol.
5 *'s

Great Story!

I'm loving the series (trilogy). Please keep'em coming.

@Anonymous Re: Randi's Comment

Randi hardly needs me to defend her, but you don't seriously think that she uses beta readers and an editing "team" for comments, or even wastes her valuable time proof-reading comments, do you?

Another

Another nice one, short and sweet. Be interesting to see more about the girl in some future story. Sorry, I'm dense about the oil and banana cream pie thing- I don't think I want know, because it might ruin banana cream pies for me, and I do like banana cream pies.

@Onethird

Todd may correct me, but as for the oil, just picture two naked bodies covered in oil, sliding against each other!

The "banana cream pie" was just a reference to old-time comedies where someone would get a cream pie in the face.

I think we can all imagine her intentions regarding the whipped cream!

Kimmi1990

Kimmi1990 - I'm not offended, we do like what we like. I'm having fun, so
it's all good. This is kind of like riding in the back seat of the family
car on a road trip with my sister:

Scene: Back seat of a 1978 Buick Station wagon. Somewhere in Kansas. At
noon. In August. The air conditioner is broke and the seats are vinyl.

//Todd is breaking sentences and leaving fragments on the seat between
them.//

Kimmi: Stop that.

Todd: I'm not doing anything.

Kimmi: You're doing it on purpose.

Todd: Doing what? //snicker//

Kimmi: You know what you're doing!

Todd: I'm not doing anything. //whistles tunelessly, utterly failing to
look innocent//

//Todd deliberately drops a descriptive statement with no verb on the
seat.//

Kimmi: Todd!

Todd: What?

Kimmi //growls//

Todd //snicker//

Scene fades out..

Seriously, I won't try to convince you to like the
writing style, but as long as you're willing to be my troll, I promise to
continue to be the sand in your underpants.

;-)

Todd172

Great Outbreak of Stories

Wonderful characterizations and lively stories... I would like to know more about Donna.

Okay

I'll be. Your little sister. Not a troll.

No sand in the panties!

"Mom! He's leaving sentence fragments. Where they're touching my side of the seat!"

"Now he's dangling participles. He just split an infinitive. Make him stop!" :-)

Another great story

Todd172, you do a very fine job of packing allot of story with a minimum of words.
Love the characters, originality and this universe you have started to create.
Among the best of the newer contributors, thanks again. Will look for you regardless of the category.

Well done yet again.

True talent.

You could definitely write professional.

I don't know why someone (not gonna look back, don't care) said you are one of the better newer authors (or something like that)

You are one of the BEST authors.. full stop

Decent story, but not sure why it's even in this category

the strongest part of the storyline is

what is not said.
What is implied, hinted at, and left open, makes it all the more ambiguous.

Great Read

You have a great way of telling a story, I've enjoyed this series. On another note, is it in our male DNA to always want to be the hero for a woman who has had a hard life. I just wonder, because we tend to go soft on women even when they have done the same offense as a man?

@Ib_Says

He put this story here because he had already posted the first two stories of this universe (Shameless and Monster) in LW, and wanted to keep the continuity.

@Anonymous 09/14/16

re:
is it in our male DNA to always want to be the hero for a woman who has had a hard life. I just wonder, because we tend to go soft on women even when they have done the same offense as a man?
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Maybe DNA.
Maybe species memory.
In our species past there was at least one near extinction.
Only the fact that there were enough female survivors which allowed enough children to be born kept H. Sapiens Sapiens from being more than another fossil record.
This lead to the instinct behind women and children to the lifeboats first and the greater tolerance for women.

One man can impregnate many women, women can only bear a relatively few children.

I really, really think you should consider publishing. It has been areal ride...

...through the series. I feel like I know these people in this world you've created within ours. And I like them...even the bad guys.
Not as if we could be friends, but because they are great characters.
I'm sure others have commented somewhat similarly, but I find your style uncanny. Sort of a mix between Jack London and Detective Sergeant Joe Friday from the old TV series, Dragnet (1951-1959).
Your style is as effective for the words that aren't there as for the ones that are.
Man, do I enjoy it!
Thank you?
Please continue.

Sequal mis-catagorized

All,
The Sequal to this is sithing in Non Human for some reason. I reported it, hopefully they'll get it fixed. Not sure what happened, maybe somebody didn't realize Monster was a nickname. It's called Pogo's Long Day.

Todd172

For anyone reading the portal , read below !

The powers that be put the next part of this story in Non-Human category , for some unknown F'ing reason. Go over there and check it out , its another Todd172 classic !
Oh , and pass the word.

It Appears Your Sequel has disappeared

It's no longer under your name??

Category for Sequel: Poigo's Very Long Day

All,
I've used Report and have now submitted the category change as an Edit, so it should move, but may take 48 to 72 hours depending on how busy they are. It is still sitting in Nonhuman as far as I can see.
Thanks for your patience.
As to the graphic novel questions - I am working it, but not sure how it will go. Its a whole different set of challenges.

Thanks Again,

Todd172

Succinct and surprising

Reminds me of Vachss's Concrete Puppy... Excellent!

Just added you to my list of favourite authors.

'Nuff said.

YOU ALWAYS KEEP YOU PRIORITIES STRAIGHT

and family is number 1 on that list, TK U MLJ LV NV

#2 BLACK OPS AND THEIR AGENTS

are people not to be messed with. TK U MLJ LV NV