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Can I Rate This Garbage Less Than Zero?
What is wrong with this? Where do I begin? So far it looks like it was written by an F student in 6th grade. Don't give up your day job.
Way to go...
First, thank god for guys like Brit Tease. Oh he might be standing up for a fellow countryman, (country person) but I think not. So far all we know is our hero's wife is probably very promiscuous, and the picnic is his first real discovery. I haven't read ahead so let's hope our author doesn't find an excuse through nymphomania, Ecstasy or Molly or something of that ilk. Let's just hope she's a bit of a slut, and go to part two.
I'd add in more than a few stories the end comes with some sort of exposure through sky writing or a movie show on the side of building with the cuckold husband meeting some beauty queen replacement while his fallen wife ends up working for minimum wage at Walmart or better working the bars for $5.00 tricks where she gets AIDS and dies. That's believable?
Alas I'd like to add I have a diminutive wife. Believe me if I ever referred to her as "Tinkerbell" I'd get a skillet over my head. I have called her "Raggedy Anne" though; she seems to have liked that. So who knows? Women? Very strange creatures...
Thanks for an interesting beginning. I'll read on, but I'm holding my breath...
A good healthy five for a start.
Jedd Clampett
Slut wife
As she told him she was busy, he should have given her an ultimatum either come now or don't come at all go stay with your mum. As she didn't come he should have had divorce papers served, as she wasn't worth fighting for Pity he didn't use his phone camera, then he could have sent the results to the head of chambers.
Waste of time
Worst story I have ever read.
1*
cuck shit.
Cuck?
Pussy more like it
"S" rhymes with hit for brains!!!!
You have to be a total freaking idiot to think that anyone is actually going to believe this garbage is even plausible...Thanks for not having to make me waste more of my time by bringing it all out right in the beginning....Somebody should have kicked both of their heads in, especially the cry baby wuss!!!!!
WTF
The Aussies make a beer called Castlemaine XXXX & it tastes like the kangaroo shit, well "mate" so's this story. What a wimp Debbie's husband is. Yuck. Pity there's no minus score. 1*
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