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by legerdemer09/13/16

Lovely

You poem is lovely and very sexy in a playful, lighthearted way.

One small quibble - in this case, I think some of the sentences could really use the extra emphasis of being set off on their own lines. The one that made me think that first was "Those eyes." To me, I heard it being said with indrawn breath, softly and sexily. With extra sauce...

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by KikahCornelius09/18/16

Thanks

for your feedback. Nice thoughts!

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