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The Beginning: Ch. 01

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by Anonymous09/20/16

Keep going!

I wonder what changes!

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by Anonymous09/20/16

Not much of a chapter

A couple of paragraphs do not make a chapter. For the next installment, try to write at least three pages. I can't speak for others, but I personally find short, one page chapters annoying to read and the story looses interest for me rather quickly.

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