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Can't Keep a Good Elf Down Ch. 04

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by whim_rider02/24/11

Very creative story. I'm interested in seeing what other enhancements Psly has. Now for the constructive criticism, there are several repeated words and unremoved corrections throughout the story, such as the "lay laid" at the begnning of the last full paragraph.

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