All Comments on 'The Vampire's Smile'

You could add suspense by drawing out the seduction, giving our now dead hero a sense of how he might survive. As such it is a nice story, could have been longer, with more build up and a more dramatic end. Also, the complaint, there is no such word as thrusted, the past tense of thrust is thrust. I now thrust, he had thrust, they thrust in unison. Keep at it, your imagination is worth exploring. Of course I'm a sucker for vampires.

It would have been super hot if the man victim had somehow turned the tables on the hot vixen of a vampiress! Like maybe, being that she had started by feeding on him, in stopping to sexually indulge herself, the victim, rather than be drained and weak, instead he starts to turn into a vampire himself and while the sexy vampiress loses herself in the sexual pleasure this victim is giving her, he creates peril for the indulgent vampiress by unexpectedly starting to feed on her!

Pls the author whoever u r kindly don't spoil the mood.remamber u r not writing a horror story.Try to prolong your articles adding the final icing with a happy ending.