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Well done
The previous chapter seemed to me to drag a bit after a great start. This puts you back on track.
Very Nice!
All I can say is please remember that this is Romance and not Loving Wives, so don't fuck them up!`
I was waiting for this!
Looks like my fate in Marcy was well placed, she not only ditched the shower orgy but actually told Dave about and stuck to her man. His question of marriage after that period sex was the stuff i was actually expecting for some time now, all your other stories already had it by now. Just like his sexual fantasies and his feelings for Marcy the idea took root fast and strong and with her saying yes in the end it was all I could have hoped for. That his folks actually like her shouldn't be a surprise, her past isn't tattooed on her forehead so it's none of their business aside from the fact that she loves Dave and they make each other happy beyond measure. But then again the day and the visit aren't over yet so much talk can go 'round before they go to their apartment :)
As usual a 5* is a just reward and now I'm looking forward to see how they break the news to friends and family.
Even my one story on Loving Wives . . .
. . . had a happy ending. It wasn't very popular in that category. :)
Well, chapter 6 is about half written . . .
. . . and there might be a plot twist in it.
Just keep it reasonable
I'm not against plot twists when they actually serve to advance or exhilarate the story, just don't separate them or make them fuck other people. That would be unreasonable by now.
Your LW story had a happy ending of questionable degree, I for one didn't exactly enjoy the story as a whole.
WHAT???
You stop HERE?? I hope you have more chapters ready!! This is getting pretty good though I'm waiting for a shoe to drop.
More please!
Keep the story going. Im hooked!!!
@ReedRichards Re: Happy Endings
I have nothing against happy endings. I recently posted my own story in LW that had a happy ending.
My problem with your LW submission, as described ad nauseam in my exchanges with FD45, is that you had the offended party asking forgiveness of the offending party, when it should have been the other way around.
My story also had the husband apologizing to the wife, but only because he was resisting her attempts to make things right, not for anything that he might have done in response to her wrongs.
This story would have been better if he was simply urged to accept and forgive her failings, in return for her asking/begging for HIS forgiveness. By essentially making him the bad guy you effectively excused her infidelity and gave her no reason not to repeat it.
Oops!
Sorry, that last comment should have been in "Screw or Bolt"!
Apologies.
Chapter 6 has been submitted . . .
. . . with a twist!
& twist is what I was waiting for!
...it can't be all that sunshine & roses. There needs to be some conflict of emotions for it to be a great story. I am, however, rooting for this couple to make it out of it in the end with NO cheating involved. Can't wait for ch. 06! (hands rub... :) )
~MD
let's do the twist!
hoping for a romantic twist, and not a bad one, but no matter what, a heck of a story. thanks.....
Great chapter!
A good chapter.
Monogamous sexual intercourse during the woman's period requires nothing more than the mutual trust and love of the couple, apart from good hygiene to prevent diseases in her especially.
I see that in the end Dave and Marcy are squeezing the throttle of their relationship, although I am concerned about the author's comment for Chapter 6.
5 * for you.
I apologize for my English (yet), is not my native language.
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