Tasting Wine and Mom Pt. 01

Waiting for pt 2

Total waste of my time

If this is your idea of a build up you are surely mistaken. This wasn't even an appetizer. Total fail. 1 fucking star!

Wtf

Wtf was that? Waste of time.

Complete and Utter Waste of Time

In case you don't know, this is a site that publishes "erotic" stories. One Star, only because there is not zero stars.

I like it and I think its a good buildup. Keep up the good work:-)

More?

You need to write "To be continued" at the bottom of the story...

should have waited

I didn't think it was a bad start but you should have held off til you had the next page done.... Setting the stage is fine but SOMETHING needs to happen or at least be hinted at...
And the title doesn't count...
Will read the next part....

damn good but more than 1 page please

Just as the title says. Damn good narrative btw *****
I love the fact the mom is aware of the attraction. Really makes the story much better imo.

WTF???

One star, only - for making me wade through this morass of phrases being used as sentences, misused punctuation, missing punctuation, and terribly boring dialogue, not to mention switching subjects in the middle of a paragraph, to reach the point where you aborted this pathetic attempt at a story!

HOT HOT

Great start,It seems as tho haters come here now to vile all stories.

Please keep writing.I love it.

WTF...

So where is the wine tasting?

Boorish comments

Some of the people who comment on here are so boorish and I think that they would be happy with a single paragraph story which was along the lines of "he stuck his cock in his mother and came, end of story". Some stories need to be slowly developed and this is one of them, keep going its a good start.

TO ALL THE ENGLISH TEACHERS WHO READ STORIES ON THIS SITE

WTF GET A LIFE OR GO READ A BOOK THIS SITE IS NOT UR FUCKING ENGLISH PAPER AND DOSENT NEED UR FUCKING GRADE OR CRITICISUM THE AIUHORS ON THIS SITE ARE NICE ENOUGH TO RIGHT A STORY FOR OUR ENJOYMENT AND ARE NOT TRYING TO WRIGHT AN ENGLISH PAPER FOR U TO GRADE AND IF THEIR GRAMMER BOTHERS U THAT FUCKING MUCH WRITE UR OWN FUCKING PAPER AND WE ALL READERS WILL BE HAPPY TO GRADE UR WORK AND TELL U WHAT A FUCK UP TEACHER U ARE AS FOR THE STORY TELLERS THEY DO GREAT WORK AND TAKE THEIR TIME TO GIVE US SOME THING GREAT TO READ SO PLEASE IGNORE ALL THE ENGLISH TEACHERS AND KEEP WRITING GREAT STORIES FOR THE WORLD TO ENJOY CAUSE WE ALL KNOW THOSE ENGLISH TEACHERS HAVENT WRITTEN ONE PAGE FOR US TO ENJOY UNLESS U COUNT ALL THEIR HATEFULL COMENTS THEY LEAVE BEHIND SO THANK YOU ALL U GREAT WRITERS ON THIS SITE

fine beginning to a series

I love the notion of "tasting mom." It conjures up images of a boy using his tongue to delicately probe the same warm hairy hole he came out of, as he inhales his own mother's sharp musky fragrance deep into his young lungs. To all mothers: no one can ever treat that wondrous orifice between your thighs with as much love and devotion as your own son. Come on, moms, just give the kid a chance and watch him lose control and go to town, slurping and slobbering all over his own mommy's cunt. Your boy'll give you the best cums of your life.

Not bad Start

These type of stories always go a little slow for me. I hope this is just a mom/son story. I always shake my head at the comments about the grammar. Really, grammar on a porn site, that's pretty stupid, best to stick to "Barns & Noble", if that's all you want to do. Especially if your masturbating while your reading, grammar is low on the list.

way too short, they didn't even get to the car before you ended it.

Good start

Quite a few moms like to tease sons. Often starts as a game and develops into something more.

That's it?

I realize it said part 1 but that's barely even a start. Try harder next time

I can just picture it

I can picture so much more in future chapters don't drop the ball.

That's It? part deux

One page with lots of filler but lacking much else. Good luck next time.

Got my attention

left me wondering how this will progress.