Too many very distracting mistakes. Get an editor!
“he made his way into the living room to see his wife Ada laying on the couch”
What was she laying? Eggs? She was "lying".
"It's you birthday”
Hello birthday!
And it goes on.
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Anonymous09/24/16
wasting my time
Someone seems intent on mixing gay/bi stories in other categories. "Gay" takes precedence over any other category - even if there is a tiny bit of group or sci/fi. Stop mixing! Most people don't want to waste time reading gay stuff if they're not gay. Maybe you need to add another category.
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Way too many mistakes
Too many very distracting mistakes. Get an editor!
“he made his way into the living room to see his wife Ada laying on the couch”
What was she laying? Eggs? She was "lying".
"It's you birthday”
Hello birthday!
And it goes on.
wasting my time
Someone seems intent on mixing gay/bi stories in other categories. "Gay" takes precedence over any other category - even if there is a tiny bit of group or sci/fi. Stop mixing! Most people don't want to waste time reading gay stuff if they're not gay. Maybe you need to add another category.
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