Red Riding Hood

Was there NO Confrontation

Why wasn't there ANY commentary regarding the cause and eventual Divorce discussed with His Wife..
Almost a very good story - Keep Trying

Kind of nice

Except from the fact that you named the 3 islands after the 3 musketeeers it was a nice read. Loved the theme and the setting. It was a little hard to get into a rythm with all the pauses and asterisks but it was interesting. Maybe a little bit more sex next time? 3*

Sure go ahead

and divorce her, but tell her why and at least let us know that everyone knows why in the family.. revenge is no good unless somebody knows and thats all you got. the story ended to quickly, did you get tired of writing it?

THE GIFT BEARING SAGA CONTINUES

with a Greek Tragedy. TK U MLJ LV NV

and?

A long happy marriage, and no explanation? I'm sure he got one, but what about us?

Eight Lines that Were Missed Out

A few days after we got home I spoke to Susie

"I think it's time for us to get divorced."

She showed no emotion.

"Yes, I think that would be best."

There was a long silence , then she said,

"It's about Wolfgang isn't it."

"Chasing other men's sheep is a dangerous occupation for wolves."

She nodded and said no more.

clever

Nicely done with a clever denouement. Enjoyed it.

Beware Englishmen bearing goats

Interesting setting. Well told story. Needs sex to be rated higher.

would like a sequel to find out what happened to the wife, please

Brilliant story telling

But I really think you just dropped the story. You stepped from questioning the husbands love of his wife to hooking up with another and waiting for divorce in two paragraphs. It was way to abrupt ...especially since you spent time filling in their past and the passion of their relationship so well. It all fit perfect until you ended without so much as a comment of them going their separate ways.

I agree with the comment about adding a chapter to fill in the wife. What a loss she suffered. NOT the donkey dick but she will wake up and see the absence of her marriage and that is the real tragedy of this story. The husband was justified in his thoughts and actions (murder is a little old school and divorce understandable) but that really wasn't the story. You set it up....a perfect story about a relationship...it felt real but it missed the actual moment.

Thanks for sharing your story. Loved the symbolism...

Enjoyed the story.

Thank you for writing.

@anon: if you actually read a story, your score doesn't get removed during the sweeps, even if it's a one. Only scores that are given without the possibility of the rater having read the story are removed, whether 1 star or 5 stars or somewhere in between.

The fact that you are ranting about this, over many stories' comment sections, tells me that you are one of the people that the sweeps are meant for.

Great Job

# 5

Lacked drama!

Whilst I enjoyed reading the story, I think the author rather glossed over the aftermath of the wife's affair, there was no interaction between man and wife, no drama, anger or any hint of recrimination, in fact the ending seemed quite rushed.
There should have been some confrontation between them to bring life to the story.

Jimmy really couldn't confront Susie about her cheating

Eleni is the only person who knows that Jimmy knew Susie was cheating on him and didn't like it. Everyone else in the village thought he knew and was ok with it, and of course Susie thought he didn't know at all. So the authorities had no reason to suspect he might have had a reason to harm Wolfgang. It was in his best interest for Susie to continue to believe he was in the dark, and for their marriage to fall apart later for some other reason - or even for her to think he was dumping her because he fell for Eleni.

Very Good Story ... but ...

Nicely crafted, but agree with several about the ending! LW does not (IMHO) involve JUST an adventurous spouse, but also the impact on and consequences to the marital relationship. Put a big check on adveywife, a much smaller one on consequences, but a shit stain on impact.

5* nonetheless

Great story ruined by a lousy ending........

should have been a 5 but gave it a 2 for the lousy ending

Noooo! Not the goat!

You killed the goat! Poor little goatie. Why did he deserve to die? This was not a BTB story, it was a BTG story. You burnt the goat! Maybe we could eat him in a gyro with some tzatziki and Greek spices. No sense in letting his sacrifice be in vain.

If you say we can eat him, I'll give you four stars. Three, otherwise.

Not bad but

I have to agree that there should have been some kind of confrontation with Susie. Leaving that out of the story seemed to lessen it somehow. But extra marks for not only killing the swine, but using a goat as an alibi.

4/5

mmmmmmmmmmmm tzatziki

is there anything it can't do? (with apologies to Matt Groening)

Getting my goat

Sorry about the goat. Giros, tsatsiki and a couple of cold Mythos beers would go well with it. Comments are welcome, except the weird stuff.

Adlutery is an opportunity to rebuild a failed marriage, or start a new one. Its all a matter of options.

Suzie lost her husband for one simple reason, she unknowingly released him from his marriage vows when a better woman was in the offing. Odds are good Suzie merely succumbed to awesome sex, and would have quickly forgotten Wolfgang once they returned from Greece. Unfortunately for her, the husband she cast aside for a few days was quickly picked up by a better woman. I hope his new relationship with Eleni is permanent.

The flaw in this story is the lack of drama as Susie learns that her marriage is over. How did all that come about? Since that is an obvious and compelling question, one wonders if the author lacked the wit or the interest to fill in that final part of the puzzle. Too bad, as otherwise it would have been a top notch story. As is its only mediocre.

But thanks for the effort.

For the want of a horny goat!

That's a novel plot device......hmmmmm.....I helped raise goats when I was younger.....yep, they want to tussle with ya......yeah, they piss on themselves as well. We had a buck that weighed around 100 lbs or so. That was interesting. Thing was, the more they fought, the hornier they got.

More

Ended to quickly , no confrontation , was going well except the end .

Yes, Foolscap,

But God often gives tzatziki, and gyros, to toothless people. Was that weird? I don't think it was weird. I've heard that weird people often don't think they're weird. Just think, I could have said, "What really, is cheating? Is it when the penis goes in the vagina?" Or, "Same old paint by the numbers." Or, "fag cuck shit." Now that would have been weird. Okay, I gave you the four.

Too Much Build-up

It took over a page and a half of a three-page story to get to the meat of the matter.

Then she's all broken up about a guy that SHOULD mean very little to her, and he doesn't confront her? Is she that stupid that she doesn't see how it looks, even if nothing WAS going on, that since she knows something WAS going on that she should hide her feelings?

And why does she HAVE such feelings? Surely she considered this a vacation fling, not a lifetime romance?

@sdc97230

Yes, if he confronted her in Greece his knowledge of the affair might have brought him under suspicion, but as soon as they were out of Greece there should have been a confrontation. I liked the line in a comment about wolves chasing other men's sheep!

I liked the story...It's a good one...

I liked the story...It's a good one...But as some comment said the end was a little rushed we never will know if he told her she knew about her cheating or just divorced because they agreed they weren't getting along anymore...3*

Getting back from Greece wouldn't make a difference for him

Because he wanted to go back TO Greece for Eleni.

This was a good story but the ending left us wanting.

The ending was too short. It explained nothing. We need to know if he confronted her and what transpired . Did he have it out with her and what was her exercise. You really left this part out,which was important to close your story .

Just ok.

A lot of details. Which I liked. But Very little happened in the story. And the ending was flat. You used more words describing the islands they were on than how their marriage ended.

4

Decent ending ... REDRUM ..... but i wouldve like to hear of her triubles more, why wont her hubby console or touch her etc.... what of the picture he took,?

#2 I WONDER IF SAM THE SHAM HAS READ THIS STORY

the verses fit very good with the tragedy. TK U MLJ LV NV

Good Story

I started reading it, afraid that it was going to be a pure cuck story. The ending was sudden for everyone including Susie, the protagonist , Wolfgang and the goat.
Keep up the good work....

Great writing

Very well told story and excellent story line. Great wordsmithing. I love the story xoxoxoxo Annette

4*s

Very well written story. Only missing two items. So I award it 4*s.

Understandable dialogue that completes the characters's thought and flows with their actions. Really enjoyed the physical description of the locations. The plot was well written and actions flowing smoothly from their thoughts.

Missing two items; her thinking. What was she feeling and thinking as Wolfgang seduced and conquered. And their confrontation. Sure he confronts her and divorced her back in England but it would have been a nice scene to end that part of the story.

Overall a very good story. I'll definitely look for more of your work Fredoberto. Thank you for the work.


AMerryman

Half a story

Need more details on end of marriage and new greek friend. Why did she decide to start with german guy in first place.

@Xzy89c

LOL, she started it off with Wofgang because of his horse schlong!

Please please please

Listen to your audience. We like your stories . Just don't slam them shut. You must revel in the revenge. "She cried and we filed for divorce" is not an ending. Just as "I found my wife cheating, so I divorced her" is not a story. Please just work harder on the endings.

Listening to feedback

I'm working on a sequel, but it may be a while before I get it done. Meantime many thanks for all the helpful comments.

Thanks for the story.

Was a good read and plausible outcome. I do think that instead of the goat maybe Susie should have gone over the cliff with Wolfi, but I don't think he or I would want to kill his wife. I also can see where he, maybe, was in kind of a fog on what to do about the wife and when to do it, so slow is understood on the confrontation. It's possible that seeing your spouse fucking someone else might induce a kind of "fog of war" effect. Like making it hard to make a firm decision at that precise moment. The other side to the fog thing is maybe attacking them during the fuck. Might be okay if you have a stick, but the big guy might could do some damage.

Gave you a 4 rating and I'm not really sure that a sequel is called for. But I will read it if it shows up.
pappy

Need more thanks

This story in my opinion needs to talk about the cheating bitch getting burned and after it's all over she needs to be told exactly what happened to her horse cock lover!

Sissussie!

The confrontation in btb CANNOT happen off-stage! You're a very good writer show us how the bitch got burned!

No actual goats...

...we're harmed in the writing of this story.

Sometimes a good man

needs to pull a few weeds from the garden.

Is this meant to be erotic?

I can't tell if this story was meant to be an erotic fiction, or a series of journal entries about this guys vacation in Greece.

The interesting parts of this story all took place off stage and were described briefly or even just hinted toward. The core of the story appeared to be the restaurants and trails... was that intentional?

Pretty good

Did sound a bit like a travel monolog. I would have liked it better if he had pictures to confront his wife with and a little more detail of confronting her unfaithfulness. Better still would have been her walking back with the asshole and both of them went off the cliff.

Either you have a vivid imagination or you're well traveled in the areas you write about. Your stories are interesting and well written but are lacking in erotic detail...not a criticism just my opinion...juice it up a little and I think you would get the higher scores that you deserve.