This is the dumbest shit I've ever read.
I liked your story. Dancing in a strip joint is a fantasy of mine. 5 Stars.
Kept me hard
You kept mixing present and past tense, often within the same sentence. Pick one and stick to it.
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wtf
This is the dumbest shit I've ever read.
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I liked your story. Dancing in a strip joint is a fantasy of mine. 5 Stars.
awesome
Kept me hard
Two tenses
You kept mixing present and past tense, often within the same sentence. Pick one and stick to it.
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