Fancy That

open mouth insert foot.
hope to see a part 2 to this.

I have just a question...

I have just a question: He was dressing a Batman costume with all that foam that make it difficult for him to take it out...so how was it possible that "someone punched him hard in the stomach" and make any harm? He wouldn't feel it...A good and funny reading though...

lol

nicely done

DAMN !

Wholly Shit, Batman! What a way to find out what kind of a cheating cunt whore you are married to. And from her own admission no less!

Cute and entertaining

5* in my book!

You need an editor

For example, you don't know how to make ellipses (it's always three dots, not four, five or six, and there's always a space after), how to use conjunctions, the difference between "its" and ""it's," you spelled "toweling" wrong, "Open mouthed" is hyphenated, you join two independent clauses with a comma, etc. You tell a story well, but you need mechanical help. Ask and ye shall receive.

Fan"fucking"tastic!!

Funny!!! Excellent story!! This could go in so many wonderful directions if more chapters were to be written.

Wife cheating

He now knows that if he witnessed the event the night before it would have been his wife enjoying a gang bang, and not her friend. Can we have a sequel please..

Great story

Leave it as is. No sequel. It will only ruin it.

nope

Has to have more.
Her destruction, the coworkers destroyed.
Cant end there without the poor guys revenge.

Loved it. I was just getting my equilibrium back from the first twist when I got hit by the more subtle second. Excellent job.

Great

I'm not sure if I'd like to read more, while Angie sounds a really hot bitch and hearing more about her would be great, it could also spoil what is a perfect ending.
I guessed just before the end that it was Julie, but Angies accidental confession took me by surprise. And you stopped at just the right place.
It could have been longer with a little more characterization and build up, but thats just a small niggle.
Five stars from me.

DONT KNOW WHAT TO DO....3*s

I'm torn between two opinions.

I want to rate this 4*s because the characters are so well defined. Angie and her husband, our protagonist. Julie and Mark , the copycat and the antagonist. The dialogue is sharply written. The plot moved quickly and to the point.

I want to give this 2*s because it is just a scene from their marriage. Keying on the wife being an exceptional physical specimen of female beauty. She is arriving very late from work. And then she disappears at the party. But all ends well as she is completely innocent of any transgressions.

Maybe too much was left out of this flash story. I mean, in their 40's but he is acting like a jealous 20 year old man.
Maybe I need some coffee, as I'm reading and writing this first thing in the morning,lol.
Thank you for the story Castlemania.


AMerryman

So...

Wife outs herself; will she go along peacefully with the divorce???

Gonna take a chance

Gonna take a chance that this will NOT turn into some sort of twisted RAAC tripe.....so gave it a five star rating and added both the story and the author to my favorites list!

Ignorance

I refer to my own ignorance.

Could someone tell me what BTB and RAAC means please?

Also, again, there will not be a sequel written by me. If anyone else wishes to write one, I would love to see it.

btb raac

burn the bitch
reconcile at all costs

basically the 2 extremes in the genre of writing, thanks for your stories, keep up the good work, sorry to lazy to sign in

Ka Pow!

Take that Batman!

Yeah old Batman got it right in the chops at the end didn't he. I never saw it coming, and that's what made it so great. It doesn't pay to mess around where there's poison ivy.

Your writing's OK. No you're not Chekhov, but who is? It used to take D.H. Lawrence a whole day to settle on some of his sentences. When you figure in the price this was certainly worthy of a Danielle Steele or a Harold Robbins.

Yes a follow up would be a fun read, and if anyone writes one I'll certainly read it, but really it's your story, you'd do the best job.

Thanks for the fun interlude. Certainly worth five points!

Jedd Clampett

wife rat herself out, burn the bitch, great story, adding you to my favorite author list :)

thought I had it figured out

Ok, I had it figured out to be Julie early on and then you got me at the end with the tongue slip...cute I liked it enough to try some of your other stories, give this one four stars !

Liked it.

4*, love the twists. Be good to see a followup to see how he handles her infidelity.

clever story

Quite proficient for beginner. Hate to draw conclusions about you given your stories depict gangbanging adulterous wives..but believe you should visit Facebook profile of dearbornmt@yahoo.com. A serial cheating wife is exposed on that profile. A number of explicit accounts of her activities with a college student of hers that she coerced into sexual relationship.
TRUE STORY REAL LIFE FACTS
SHE LOST COLLEGE INSTRUCTOR JOB IN HELENA MONTANA BECAUSE OF THOSE DETAILS AND A SEX PHOTO.
Her sexual biography detailing her numerous affairs with many married men..their names and some contact info are available
If you send FRIEND REQUEST you can get numerous additional details
ENOUGH FOR YOU TO WRITE A SERIES. YOU CAN ALSO GET HER CONTACT INFO SO YOU COULD INTERVIEW AND VERIFY.
Profile was set up by friend of student whose reputation and marriage she intentionally destroyed and then cost him his job

Same idea as Tangled Web by Aussie Bard

Nice story, but I think Aussie Bard did it better.

Against My Better Druthers aka 50 Shades of Matt Moreau

Way late to comment party due to initial automatic filter of stomach twisting erotic subject matter but upon further review kudos for multiple wind ups and deft literary style . Five stars reluctantly assesed.

Full marks * * * * *

1*

stupid cuck shit.

Unfinished story - 1 star

Cute, but not a complete story. Better, though, then that piece of crap 'What The...'.

No ending

Funny idea with the double twist, though ending it there with a punchline made it less of a story and more a poorly thought out joke.
Yet another unfinished story, like thousands of others on this site, where the author can't be bothered to write the most interesting part, the aftermath.

It is the reason...

I carry a Glock. I'm not one of those stupid cuck husbands.