The only comment I have is that you may need to work in someway to tell who is the speaker when you have your story breaks. Is it the professor, is it the girls etc.
Beyond that well done development and getting into the characters minds, thank you.
Keep going....This could be a good start to alot more chapters;)
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Anonymous10/01/16
Five stars
I liked seeing the inner thoughts of the professor, as he lost himself to lust, and then assumed the control he was willingly given. Seeing her thoughts as she gave herself over, her need to please, her desire to be good... It all combined into a very hot story.
I hope to read more about this pair in the future!
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Anonymous10/02/16
A very good start. I like the descriptions of her giving over control.
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Anonymous10/02/16
Good Potential
I liked your description of the action very much, but could do without
most of the " mind games". Maybe save that for a psych class?
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Anonymous10/03/16
MORE!!!!!
I need MORE!!! This is one of the best I have read!
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Anonymous10/04/16
Nice Start....
well written...good character development....looking forward to "Good Girl" and Sirs further adventures....
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Anonymous10/10/16
Oh my gosh!!!
This is the best erotica I've ever read. It gave me feelings I never knew could be felt!! $
English
More please
Please continue this story. So much potential
Well done
The only comment I have is that you may need to work in someway to tell who is the speaker when you have your story breaks. Is it the professor, is it the girls etc.
Beyond that well done development and getting into the characters minds, thank you.
Not bad!
Keep going....This could be a good start to alot more chapters;)
Five stars
I liked seeing the inner thoughts of the professor, as he lost himself to lust, and then assumed the control he was willingly given. Seeing her thoughts as she gave herself over, her need to please, her desire to be good... It all combined into a very hot story.
I hope to read more about this pair in the future!
A very good start. I like the descriptions of her giving over control.
Good Potential
I liked your description of the action very much, but could do without
most of the " mind games". Maybe save that for a psych class?
MORE!!!!!
I need MORE!!! This is one of the best I have read!
Nice Start....
well written...good character development....looking forward to "Good Girl" and Sirs further adventures....
Oh my gosh!!!
This is the best erotica I've ever read. It gave me feelings I never knew could be felt!! $
I need...
A very cold shower...
And to find Dr. Lane...holy shit!
SC
Loved it!
Please write more!! This is by far my favorite, I love the "good girl" name calling!
Wow!
Beautiful job.
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