But I found it hard to read, particularly because your grammar, word choice and syntax were really out of context.
I think you have talent, but I would also recommend finding an editor for your next piece, it would really help this to flow better.
Best of luck!
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Anonymous10/04/16
I enjoyed it!
Nevermind the naysayers; I enjoyed your tale and I'm looking forward to the next part.
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Anonymous10/05/16
hope there is a second chapter of this.
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Anonymous10/13/16
wow
loved the story, and thought your writing style was excellent
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Anonymous10/13/16
Excellent start
Looking forward to finding out if you took it further, she is certainly up for it.
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Anonymous10/14/16
Close to a fantasy
I have a fantasy of dad and I going dogging.
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Anonymous10/15/16
GOOD
Good story. Hope there is more. Daughter needs to clean her Daddy now.
me&my wife were having sex&having a orgasm.our 18 year old daughter came running into the our bedroom naked.she was hotter than hell .she had been watching us have sex.she was rubbing her cunt moaning&groaning.she run into the room.she started squirting on us&jumped into bed with us.my wife is bi sexual she grabbed daughter .I never heard so much yelling moaning&groaning.my wife had talked to me about teaching our daughter bi&this was it.daughter took right to it..our pretty daughter sleeps with us now.she is bi sexual now.my wife went wild over this its different&daughter took right to it.they really put on a show for me.i don't watch much tv anymore.
Well written and exciting story, I hope the author treats us to a part 2?
More PLEASE!
We need to know what happens next. A gentleman does not leave a girl unsatisfied.
Good basic ideas...
But I found it hard to read, particularly because your grammar, word choice and syntax were really out of context.
I think you have talent, but I would also recommend finding an editor for your next piece, it would really help this to flow better.
Best of luck!
I enjoyed it!
Nevermind the naysayers; I enjoyed your tale and I'm looking forward to the next part.
hope there is a second chapter of this.
wow
loved the story, and thought your writing style was excellent
Excellent start
Looking forward to finding out if you took it further, she is certainly up for it.
Close to a fantasy
I have a fantasy of dad and I going dogging.
GOOD
Good story. Hope there is more. Daughter needs to clean her Daddy now.
Very good
Looking forward to more
Great story.
Thanks for posting. I would have enjoyed dry humping that fine ass ...
Hot
That is something I would love to do. I have always wanted to let daddy take me.
Very hot
Thanks.
Yes, Daddy
I would love to be your little girl, you are the perfect daddy.
Let's take another walk soon
You write so well, it draws me in
me&the wifes oversexed daughter.
me&my wife were having sex&having a orgasm.our 18 year old daughter came running into the our bedroom naked.she was hotter than hell .she had been watching us have sex.she was rubbing her cunt moaning&groaning.she run into the room.she started squirting on us&jumped into bed with us.my wife is bi sexual she grabbed daughter .I never heard so much yelling moaning&groaning.my wife had talked to me about teaching our daughter bi&this was it.daughter took right to it..our pretty daughter sleeps with us now.she is bi sexual now.my wife went wild over this its different&daughter took right to it.they really put on a show for me.i don't watch much tv anymore.
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