All Comments on 'Once and For All'

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AnonymousAnonymousover 7 years ago

fuck me that was shit

AnonymousAnonymousover 7 years ago
Crap.

Worse than crap.

Shark-shit.

AnonymousAnonymousover 7 years ago
Damn...

I wish i had bever stopped smoking...this story gave me cancer anyways.

AnonymousAnonymousover 7 years ago

" he sat on top of Hannah's bare naked fully shaved chest about to expose her snatch." - There's nothing I love more than a woman with a fully shaved chest.

prop69prop69over 7 years ago
Screwy story

A guy be beaten by a petite girl and then fucked to death...So is the story

AnonymousAnonymousover 7 years ago
You need an editor.

And probably a better writer too.

Mael99Mael99over 7 years ago
It's a mess

The basic idea is alright, but you need to slow things down and expand on every sentence, because you skipped through it so quickly that the reader has no idea what is going on and who is doing what to whom.

AnonymousAnonymousover 7 years ago
#

WTF ???

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