Is Love All or Nothing? Ch. 01

Jackie or Jessie, Make up your mind and why is this in romance and not non-erotic?

is that all there is?

Did the rest of it get lost?

There will be more

hope more comes out soon

Maybe a little longer.

more is coming

Next chapter is on approval process right now and should be up soon. Yes, it is longer.

Not too Shabby!

Not too shabby of a story. Will continue reading to see where this goes. If this is your first attempt to writing a story; overall not bad at all. I see potential here.

Definitely a good start!

.....on to Ch. 02.

Good story

Definitely has good plot and character development. Keep writing. I'm looking forward to see where this goes.

You do better with the dialogue, but the rest is so filled with errors it's hard to read. The tense changes back and forth from past to present, there too many repetitions and poor punctuation.

good potential

Sounds like an intriguing storyline. I do have to agree that the inconsistency of tense is very very distracting. I never made it to the end because of that.

Please get an editor.

The story is just unreadable right now. All the mistakes jump out at you.

Nice openers

A bit on the short side. Interesting people and space to go in almost any direction.

Good first chapter

A good first chapter.
For now, I see a lot of intrigue, there must be many things in the closet.
5 * for you.
I apologize for my English (yet and forever), isn't my native language.