My Little Ventrue Ch. 11

Awesome Series!

I am glad you are back Novus and are going to continue the story. You are a very talented writer and I can definitely see you as a published writer. I am excited for the next part of the story and where you will take us next. Continue the great work!

confused about the chapter in the title?

The previous story was labeled with ch 10 and this is ch 14. Are there missing chapters or was this mislabeled?

Chapter title - woops!

Ah shit, I must have hit a 4 instead of a 1. This is supposed to be chapter 11. I'll get it fixed.

Best vampire story on this site.

You know how to write a story, sir. Fantastic job. Can't wait for the next part. Keep it up.

Is the new pov going to be Jack's sister? It seemed like you were foreshadowing more involvement for her, as well as foreshadowing Jack considering whether or not to get a ghoul--and those two things further seemed like they might go hand in hand. If so, that would be a pretty interesting direction to go in.

Appreciation

I really enjoyed this series. A few things that particularly stood out that I'd like to compliment:

The lack of a harem theme. I'm getting really sick of those and I do hope you don't decide to drive the story in that direction. Thats remains your choice of course, still...

I applaud jack as a character. It is so refreshing to find a protagonist that isn't absolutely flawless. His 'realistic' appearance and attitude, if that is the right way to phrase it, are very well presented.

The Prince: She does fantastic things for the story, especially the relationship arc between Jack and her. Despite being a man myself, I find the constant portrayal of men as most powerful and dominant between the genders to be very tiresome and uninspiring. You present a powerful female character without it feeling inorganic and forced into the story. I mean to say that sometimes feminist writers force personal persuasions upon their writings that don't really belong. (Not that I'm 'accusing' you of being a feminist, of course.)

All in all, my personal favourite series I've read on the site so far. Well done! Looking forward to the next one!

Good just stumbled on ch 11

Looking forward to book 2chspter 11 a fitting end
djb