Have really enjoyed the pace of this story, much better than a wham,bam,thank you ma'am. Hope the relationship keeps moving at this pace, and look forward to reading the next chapter. Thanks for all your efforts.
i like the story... great development! i love the double persona she create of Barbie and when her son ask for Barbie. but i feel like this chapter and the last one could have been in the same chapter. the first chapters of the story were 2 pages and considering that you repeat the first 3 paragraph in each chapter, please dont make them too short like that :P
kakwann, I realize some of the chapters are short; I wanted to separate the events is why I chose to make it two different chapters. It was also supposed to create interest in the next chapter, at least it did for me. Which is the way I wrote this series, as if I were reading it, not perfect but an interesting story with character development and having Jay struggle with the terms and type of relationship he would have with his mother after choosing to allow her to be part of his life. again.
English
Transformation almost complete.
Have really enjoyed the pace of this story, much better than a wham,bam,thank you ma'am. Hope the relationship keeps moving at this pace, and look forward to reading the next chapter. Thanks for all your efforts.
Wonderful
Great chapter and nice touch ending with the "yes sir " shows that submissive side of her personality that we all thought was in there. Well played.
Great
I concur with all the above statements, great work!!
too short...
i like the story... great development! i love the double persona she create of Barbie and when her son ask for Barbie. but i feel like this chapter and the last one could have been in the same chapter. the first chapters of the story were 2 pages and considering that you repeat the first 3 paragraph in each chapter, please dont make them too short like that :P
Short Chapters
kakwann, I realize some of the chapters are short; I wanted to separate the events is why I chose to make it two different chapters. It was also supposed to create interest in the next chapter, at least it did for me. Which is the way I wrote this series, as if I were reading it, not perfect but an interesting story with character development and having Jay struggle with the terms and type of relationship he would have with his mother after choosing to allow her to be part of his life. again.
Nice
Love the short chapters !
Keeps me wanting more !!!!
Finally Very Yummy!
Nice to see it get very hot indeed! Thank you!
Short chapters are fine.
Just keep them fucking and a little more descriptive and hot please.
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