Mostly well written and laid out but seriously in need of an edit. 1. "He asked me as he pointed towards a room medium sized storeroom in the back corner of the warehouse " 2. " I had never have imagined" 3. "You probably should go out and grab the purchase orders from the front desk, and why don't you the catsuit on." Some readers may be able to skim over errors but they are a speed bump to my brain. Sorry.
Why does she stay with Dave? Can't be love, is she just so mercenary that she stays for the security the marriage offers?
so, is she just rob's? or do the other guys get to play too? since she is parading across the warehouse in a sex suit.
Great story. Looking forward to the next chapter
I didn't think you could top the last story! I hope that we will see another chapter soon!
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Good story for the genre.
Mostly well written and laid out but seriously in need of an edit.
1. "He asked me as he pointed towards a room medium sized storeroom in the back corner of the warehouse "
2. " I had never have imagined"
3. "You probably should go out and grab the purchase orders from the front desk, and why don't you the catsuit on."
Some readers may be able to skim over errors but they are a speed bump to my brain. Sorry.
Why
Why does she stay with Dave? Can't be love, is she just so mercenary that she stays for the security the marriage offers?
more, please?
so, is she just rob's? or do the other guys get to play too? since she is parading across the warehouse in a sex suit.
Great story
Great story. Looking forward to the next chapter
Wow!
I didn't think you could top the last story! I hope that we will see another chapter soon!
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More submissions by steviet.