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Forgetting Clayton Ch. 01

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by Hitchhiker07/12/04

I, I,

There is or course me, myself, and I, even one left a feeling thine. The third person watching now that would have......Mystery a thing of wonder and suspence making the reader want as a lover makes the partner want.

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by unculbact07/28/05

Just one improvement

Hot masturbation scene, but the prologue with the swimming pool and cleaning crew is irrelevent to the story. It would have been great if the pool cleaners could have been the audience for her self-pleasure. Among other things, an adoring audience cheering her on would have been a great antidote to the body image anxiety she felt looking at herself in the mirror.

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