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Lord, please help keep badly written stories from Literotica!!!!
Floor/ground
Tenses wrong and can't keep story straight.
EDITOR EDITOR EDITOR!!!!!!!!!!!!!
LOVED IT!
Perfect little short story! Keep writing!
Potential
I agree it was a good premise but hard to follow due to bad editing.
To the first Anon
To the anon who said we should keep all the badly-written stories off LE: Can that include ALL the furry (werewolves are furries, don't tell me otherwise) and vampire stories?
Potato
I like potatoes. Not really sure why I had to say that...
Anyway, good story, but could use some improvement, like how the scene had a tendency to flow just a little to much like water, you know what I mean?
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