The Link Pt. 03: The Huntress

Perfect

Thank you.

Content.

I find myself truly happy reading your stories. The depth of character and the sheer emotion you put into your works is simply wonderful.

A satisfying closure

The curve ball that is sabatini is hard to hit but made the story more dramatic. It worked. I also liked the legacy thing and changing the world

Minor flaw

Corbett didn't bond with Teegan in Part 1, he tried and Teegan denied when Natalie didn't trust him.

Inspiring

The hope in your story is inspiring. I liked the idea of Corbett's legacy after his initial meddling as well as Teegan locating her birth mother.
Great story. Excellent reading!

not cognizant, but amazed

I'm tired, but WOW. Had to read Pt. 03 in a day, when I am very busy. I first cringed when she became pregnant, but you recovered perfectly. I, too, wish this was real. Generating peace rather than disorder and discontent. I applaud your work.

I hope you continue writing, and if you decide to publish, please, please let us know.

Frazodz

You...it...they...

OMFG! Amazing! I must admit I was worried where the General was going to suggest at the end, but...WOW!

Someone earlier mentioned that Teegan didn't bond with Corbitt in the first part, and that's partially true. It wasn't IN the first part, but it was alluded to. Remember, he created Esmeralda, and held her once and she bonded with him. When Nat and Esmeralda/Teegan were taken to Portland, that was the 2nd time he touched her and she didn't bond because Nat thought he had cooties.

Well done, DreamCloud! You created a wonderful story with a colorful cast of players. This would make a great screenplay; although I worry that Hollyweird wouldn't do it justice.

Kudos to you, my dear!

Sxualchocol8

Aboslutely brilliant!!!!

Great read!!!
Another great story. I always enjoy your stories.

OUTSTANDING !!!!

This tale kept me enthralled from Part 1, Chapter 1 all the way to the third epilogue. It is more than worth the time invested by the reader. Thanks to DreamCloud for all the wonderful effort!!

Fantastic!!!

I can't say enough about how wonderful this story is. I read it in one long sitting and now will have to,go and reread it slower for maximum enjoyment. I am thrilled with the overall message that in the end love wins.

Thank you for brightening my week in the wake of rather dismal political news

LBLR15

Amazing

Your work never ceases to amaze me. I didn't read the first two parts. Now, I am going to have to rectify that problem. I always find your stories to be some of the best I have read. But this has to be the best and the top of my list of favorites.

Very Special

I will never understand how difficult it is to write something of this magnitude. Your use of remote sensing is growing and it is for the better. Very well done.

What a wonderful story

Looking at the three chapters, I can't think of a more redemptive story. Thank you.

Imagine

Just imagine the well written fight scene on the big screen! Tengen vs the ultimate evil, glowing a soft white that gets brighter and brighter until the evil is consumed.

This would be a fantastic movie.

Once again, well written, well thought out and we'll done.

Great job, DC!

Just prefect!

Perhaps the best story written by Dreamcloud.
Simply perfect.
Not only have loved the story because I particularly feel identified with Sam, it is that I have come to love all the good people of the three chapters.
I still think that the author is a genius and that their stories should reach the big screen, although I recognize that some scenes would be censored by the Hollywood producers.
That is why it remains one of my favorite authors.
Dreamcloud, I give it 5 * because it is not possible to give more, but deserves 5000.

However, I must say that there is one thing in this story that has not liked anything ...



I deeply regret that this wonderful tale is over.

I would very much like the not too distant future, the author reconsider the ability to write some additional chapter, telling the life of little Rose in her teens, Teegan, Caleb and Zane, at maturity and, of course, Sam and Natalie in her old age.

I say it as a simple comment ... if the author wants to ignore my comment ... could always find someone to convince him ..., even if by force ...

I'm just joking, I do not like violence under any circumstances.

My honest congratulations and trust that the author will continue to write more stories with the same quality to which we are accustomed.

I apologize for my English, is not my native language.

If there were more than 5 stars...

What shall I add?
I resented it when I had to put down the tablet for a necessary chore.
I have n e v e r been so drawn into a story. Maybe some Asimov novel or similar SF.
It all felt just as logical as it is fantastic.
I can't thank you enough for sharing this story with us.
I have enjoyed other stories of yours, but so far this tops all of the ones I read
And the finale!. I am from one of the corners mentioned in the finale and only dream it could really happen.

We need her now.

What a timely story, if only it could be a true documentary and not fiction. Now, just as has been true of all of our awful "civilized" human existence, we need Teegan.

Mistake!:(

I'm sorry, today I see a mistake in my previous post,
where I say prefect, I want to say perfect.
I think I'm turned blind man...
Sorry for my grammatical error.

Great story! Please, get this published...

A third and last time, I suggest you consider publishing this novel in book format. I think a rigorous, professional editing process could really bring out the best and turn this amazing story into a shining masterpiece. And I feel like that's what it and the author deserve.
I have come to really enjoy the genuine characters ("good" and "bad") and hardly felt that something was out of place, if at all. I am only left curious as to what kind of creature Sabbatini is. This actually makes me think you may plan to continue this saga, which is simply something to hope for and look forward to.
Thank you for writing this!

- R

Feedback and a Request

A real masterpiece, read all 3 chapters just to catch up with this last installation. I truly request and I think so does the other readers for you to consider publishing this story.

It's a film material.


5star but wish if I can have more
Great.

Issues

My only concern is just how blindingly ignorant and naive every person in this story is. A drug mule who doesn't think of cell phone tracking? Things like that. Simple things that make the news daily and nobody thought of it and it got people killed or injured. Now maybe i'm looking at this through my own experiences but people in this situation wouldn't have been so lethally stupid about their actions and their security.

Otherwise, this was an exceptional story and wouldn't mind seeing this as a film.

Awesome

Love is all you need.

Page Turner

This series has been the literal definition of one. Some of the minor characters will need to be fleshed out more for the novelisation which must surely follow, and I am thinking Danny Boyle for the film, (somebody please forward this to him) but really as a reader there was nothing more we could have asked for. Outstanding work as usual from this fine writer.

Another one to set the standard!

Another example of why you are one of the very best out there! My thanks!

Excellent

Most excellent!!!

Best read

Loved it where to from here??

Great read

Awesome story. Love can conquer all

Spectacular!

An excellent story, definitely in the top rank of all the erotica I have ever read. And I agree with the author; this is the right place to end the story.

I also agree with some of the other commenters that this story DESERVES to be made into a movie. Far more that most of the hollyweird dreck that they peddle. This story has EVERYTHING.

Fantastic work but...

I would love to know who or what Sabbatini was, what the extent of his powers were and how he could have known Teegan would come into existence before she was born.

Additionally, I have my reservations on world politics being so easily solved by the American military industrial complex. In any event, it was an excellent read! Well worth the wait!

AWESOME

I have read every story you have written. Love them all

Lovely story

Thank you for the story! Such a lovely and hopeful ending as well.

DC's writing just gets better and better!

Wow. This is a truly amazing and powerful series. You never know which direction things are going to turn. I hope there is another Part in The Link. Another six star story; well done.

About making it a movie: I feel as if too much would be lost while cutting this down to movie length.

A short series on the other side... easily possible.

Superb story wonderfully told and that is all that matters.

more than "just wow"

Thanks so much DreamCloud, for this third excellent installment in the Link series. Every detail has been wonderfully thought out and so eloquently written. the scene at Sabatini's bedside and the way everyone Teegan had affected coming to her aid was powerful. When I see some other stories at 20 pages, i sometimes groan and think: this is going to take a while. But when I saw your new installment up and running, I couldn't wait to dive in.

Thank you for the investment of your creative talent and time in putting this story together, proving that some of the best stories on Literotica don't have to be of the wham bam thank you ma'am variety. Thank you.

this was the whipped cream

to top off the sundae.

beautiful

Excellent

An absolutely excellent story that I couldn't put down. I look forward to more either in this series or something else.

Raising the bar

Wonderful and ingenious. I yearned for what teagan had.I'll read the entire DreamCloud now. I Wanted to become the best I could be, like all your characters.

The best story in literotica

You made me cry at Sabbatini's room, all in all you made me want to become a better person . Through your writtings in my eyes you are an angel , thank you , thank you from the bottom of my heart !
Rico

Speachless

Cotillion, promise, mountain and now link. Great mind, grand images, STERLING! Looking forward!

Beautiful

Done it again. This series was fantastic and badly needs to be published!

"become a better person"

As anon said below, your stories not only give hope, but more importantly, motivation to do good.

Part 1 was a bit strong on the angel baby, but part 2 brought this up to the universal with your portrayal of the teenage Teegan, and part 3 blended in Luke's struggle with the emperor very nicely.

Truly well done: well written, great, complex characters, interesting and surprising plot, and maintained the dramatic tension throughout the whole and the intermediate climaxes without letdown or losing our interest.

Surely, you can build an audience for e-books about this world you see. If anyone deserves to make some kind of living off of this, it is certainly you. This is the first of your works I have read, but I see that I have several more to look forward to.

Congratulations, thank you and good luck.

The series should definitely be published in a book! This wil be a best seller.

Thank you for a truly excellent story: great plot, wonderful characters, excellent pace, brilliant strath line.

This was another suburb series. No less then we expect under your name.

A musical dedication for this story.

Although I have already made my comment on this story when I read it, the other day I found an old vinyl record in my house, and I remembered that Caleb was a violinist, so I think this piece of music was appropriate to dedicate to this story. They like the musical dedications to the good histories).
This is an electric violin instrumental (the first one I heard in my youth), is "Nine by nine", played by "The Famous John Dummer`s Band" of the early 70's.

All 5 Star Stories -Thank You!

DreamCloud,

The first story of yours I read was titled “The Promise”. I thought it was so good I went back and read all the rest of the stories you’ve posted, finishing with “The Rehab”. They all made me feel like I was experiencing events as they unfolded. I hope you continue posting “long” works. I doubt you could weave everything together as enjoyably in a lower page count.

Benchmark!!!

Every author has one work that is unquestionably his or her best. For Stephen King it is The Stand. For Victor Hugo it is Les Miserables. I have read all of your submissions to this website. The Link, in my opinion, is the best of your writing. I literally could not stop reading each chapter until I had finished it completely. Please continue your fine writing and find a publisher who should gladly put your work into book form.

Riveting !!

Like so many of the other commenters I think this is worthy of a printed version. Brilliantly written, I was sad to reach the end, I will be re-reading it, something I rarely do... well done !

Excellent read

As someone else said this is a great short store that should be published. A great premise for a film. Your characters are well written and give insight to our own insecurities and how our mates really see us. Keep up the great work

As usual, you hit the nail on the head.

If only it were that easy to bring world peace and love to the world, but I would love to see us try. Your writing is exceptional and insightful. I agree with the other comments that you need to be published. Keep up the good work.