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The Borderline Ch. 01

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by gjames1710/10/16

Wonderful start!

Very well written. I'm looking forward to chapter two. Thank you for sharing this.

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by Anonymous10/10/16

Great story

I can't believe how well written your story is..please tell me there will be a chapter 2 soon...so looking forward to it

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by becky710/11/16

Very good..

This was a very well written story. Perfect background on both characters and great flow throughout. I cannot wait for the next chapter.

Becky

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by Sexymax10/11/16

Loved it so much

This brought back memories of the late 80's, especially now that I live in Melbourne and actually know most of the locations you mentioned, especially Moonee Ponds as I now reside close to there.
This was a genuine story and well-written in my opinion, I really feel sorry for you for the way things have gone,
I am so looking forward to reading future parts.
Keep Up The Awesome Work.

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by Anonymous10/11/16

Melbourne wahoo

Love the local feel being a Melbourne person well done and bring on the next chapter

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by Xzy89c10/11/16

Excellent writting

Straight from your heart and very readable. You have an ability few have. You can write an interesting story....

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by BigrimmstalesToo10/12/16

So romantic

Wow, it's not often a story brings a tear to my eye but this simple tale did. I loved its slow unravelling of the storyteller's exploration and 'coming out'. I did think the implied 'she's a lesbian because her father abused her' line was unnecessary. Yes it is true that some women are turned by their experiences of abuse at the hands of men, but it's a small proportion; disproportionately used as a plot line. Most women, or at least amongst my friends, knew they were gay from as early as puberty. Celebrate it!

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by Anonymous10/12/16

Honest Storytelling...

You unfold the relationship of these two women in a very honest, and unforced way. Nice job! PS: When Holly inherits the money, I believe the word you want is "exorbitant."

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by Anonymous10/12/16

Wow this was very good. I can't wait to read what happens now that they've reconnected.

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by TSreader10/13/16

A very yummy start!

Very well done! Thank you!

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by Anonymous01/22/17

Great story

A great story, well written. More please.

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by Anonymous02/11/17

Melbournian here

Loved having a location i can so easily relate to.
Whilst this story struck a nerve that brought back memories of a similar shunning from the church in my younger years, i still thoroughly enjoyed this story.

On to the next chapter.

Many thanks
xo

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