That was just bad. I pictured someone that just had 6 cups of coffee high on caffeine telling this story at a fast pace. *
Not even worth a comment. Try writing again in another ten years or so - after you have grown up.
Not bad for your first time. Read more stories from other writers and you'll get better.
Started well but progressed into degradation. A loving son would do much better than that.
It was written by a 12 yo who had been into his dad's booze
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Wow
That was just bad. I pictured someone that just had 6 cups of coffee high on caffeine telling this story at a fast pace. *
Two stars.
Not even worth a comment. Try writing again in another ten years or so - after you have grown up.
First try
Not bad for your first time. Read more stories from other writers and you'll get better.
Ok short story
Started well but progressed into degradation. A loving son would do much better than that.
Sounds like
It was written by a 12 yo who had been into his dad's booze
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