Loving it!
I see three ways of this developing
1. she will be fed up and jump him - doesn't seem right, she's to analitic
2. he will make a step - not likely
3. a crisis type advance = they separate for some reason only to figure out their need.
Really nice writing, I am loving the story so far. Hopefully you will bring them together in the next chapter, because it is obvious that they are both very much into each other, but don't know how to open the door.
One of them fall asleep and talks in their dreams and yes they are heading towards each other. Jess has already shown how to make the other female get her back up, that was why she pulled the sudden bedroom move. Jess is no amature in the mating game. but good light hearted fun reading well worth 5*
At first I didn't think I was going to like this story but i am glad that I didn't stop reading because you're developing this story so beautifully. It's not rushed and the pace is just right. Can't wait for more!
A delightful story so far and one that is developing beautifully. You are a skilful story teller. I think that you would be doing this story and its characters a grave injustice if you finished the story in only one more chapter. It would be rushed and unworthy of the two five star chapters you've done so far. If you have the time and the motivation I think the two chapter option you mentioned at the start would be the way to go.
It's fun to watch the two of them dance around each other as the light is beginning to come on. They may not understand it yet, but one small step at a time they are coming together.
English
A++
Loving it!
I see three ways of this developing
1. she will be fed up and jump him - doesn't seem right, she's to analitic
2. he will make a step - not likely
3. a crisis type advance = they separate for some reason only to figure out their need.
waiting to see this story develop!
Really nice writing, I am loving the story so far. Hopefully you will bring them together in the next chapter, because it is obvious that they are both very much into each other, but don't know how to open the door.
the 4th way
One of them fall asleep and talks in their dreams and yes they are heading towards each other. Jess has already shown how to make the other female get her back up, that was why she pulled the sudden bedroom move. Jess is no amature in the mating game. but good light hearted fun reading well worth 5*
Good
At first I didn't think I was going to like this story but i am glad that I didn't stop reading because you're developing this story so beautifully. It's not rushed and the pace is just right. Can't wait for more!
Perfecto!
keep it comin'...
~MD
Um...
So, like, was I the ONLY one yelling at the screen, saying that Stephen is an idiot and Jess is ready to have a cat-fight?!
Huh...I thought not.
Good job!
SC
Really like this!
Great story...like the way you are writing this...especially the "slow burn!"
Truly Lovely
A delightful story so far and one that is developing beautifully. You are a skilful story teller. I think that you would be doing this story and its characters a grave injustice if you finished the story in only one more chapter. It would be rushed and unworthy of the two five star chapters you've done so far. If you have the time and the motivation I think the two chapter option you mentioned at the start would be the way to go.
Thankyou for a lovely story.
very well developed
It's fun to watch the two of them dance around each other as the light is beginning to come on. They may not understand it yet, but one small step at a time they are coming together.
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