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Nice start...
Please continue
Next Chapter Please
Keep the story going. Waiting for next chapter. Thanks
nice start
was a good start, but, you had a few errors you may want to get someone to edit for you before you post, even the pros have someone edit for them,we all make mistakes, always good to have another set of eyes to check things out. i use spell check and have a friend edit for me.
Good Start!
Promising start, takes me back to when I was a teen and a similar incident with my cousin.
Yes more please !
Great beginning.
Storyline is promising. Pleasantly surprised that you chose to start with the female's perspective. Please continue.
Good start
I would have liked a little more but, hopefully the next chapters will be a little longer. Great start so far.
AWESOME
I want more of this as fast as you can!
great start..had me hard
get chapter 2 ready...I am
OK for starters but too little
This was too little and too short. You could have at least left us with Derrick's post-ride experience and thoughts.
Waiting for more! That was too short. What about Derrick?
Too short.
This is not a cute way to say we want more.It wasway to short to publish.
Yes, a funny point to stop the story ?? However, it has a lot of potential and should be a lot of fun when they get some alone time to talk about it, etc. Thanks.
That's it..?
Sorry, but you need to write more before posting a story. That was barely a page and you need maybe two or more to really hold a reader attention. I liked it, but don't know if I'll bother coming back to look for more if they're going to be that short.
more
dam u
more more more....
You have a good story going ? Dont stop now....i want more
please continue.....thank you....
more more more
Great story please please continue!
Looking good so far
Please try not to keep us waiting too long for the rest of this story
I like where this is going you perverted fuck!
Nya!
loved it
great first story keep up the good work
Awesome
is all I got to say. When can we see chapter 2?
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