The title should have been: "How Becca fucked up a Jag"! The characters? All from some out of space planet: Example: The young man managed to be omnipresent in all the parkings in the city...Only a extraterrestrial could manage that stunt! This could have been a funny story at least if one of the people staring at them from the office building next door was her cuck husband! 1*
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Anonymous10/20/16
Bad
This isn't even good enough for Lush or Asst. much less here
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Anonymous10/20/16
HOT
One of the better L.W. stories and of course the gay female haters attack it.
The gays here only like B.T.B stories.
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Anonymous10/20/16
I guess hub got what he deserves showing wife's hot pussy off like that gave her the green light to have some fun..now it's. Going to take wife awhile before she gets bored with that big cock.
Arousing and so hot. Flashing a valet attendant is so much fun. Fucking him even better. 5 Stars.
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Anonymous10/20/16
Idiotic fantasy by a pubescent author!!!
What a bunch of crap!!! She is married and fucks a stranger without protection??!! You are only stupid!! Which man would be married to such a low slut!!! Only real pervert or brain sick one like you!!!
too fast to go from prim and proper wife to hot slut in such a short time. Story needed to be developed. Plus you had word and quotation errors.
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Anonymous10/21/16
Did anyone else see that flying saucer?
Becca never had a chance. But why did you leave that part out? Wonder how she'll explain giving syphilis to her husband? Guess we'll learn that in chapter 5? A really deep engaging plot.
Where did hubby go after that dinner and night of fucking . He disappeared from the story and she went into complete pig mode. Questions need to be answered
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Anonymous10/21/16
Horrible effort!
If you don't have the self respect to re-read, and edit your own writing, if you're only level of interest is to slap some piece of shit together and post, then you're wasting your time and your reader's time. The story made ZERO sense.
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Anonymous10/22/16
Slut
She has cheated on her husband he will find out if she is reguler with long cock.
By the way 3 1/2 inches round is only 1.1 inches diameter about average. we use to have a saying
" short and thick does the trick. long and thin only makes babies"
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Anonymous10/26/16
Stated off hot and turned out disappointing
Just another cheating Cunt with no regard for her husband. Why be married if you care so little for your spouse. She didn't even have a minuscule thought about her husband. He vanished from the story. Does he even exist? The sex was very hot but so what if it ends empty with no climax like this story. I don't think she is actually married or wants to be. No spouse with any self respect would want to be so totally disregarded like this. Disappointing ending.
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Anonymous12/12/16
Yes
Nothing like a sexy beautiful woman who is I touch with her inner slut.
English
You aren't imaginative
Not even close. Just kind of boring huge paragraphs with not a spark of anything but sleaze.
The title should have been...
The title should have been: "How Becca fucked up a Jag"! The characters? All from some out of space planet: Example: The young man managed to be omnipresent in all the parkings in the city...Only a extraterrestrial could manage that stunt! This could have been a funny story at least if one of the people staring at them from the office building next door was her cuck husband! 1*
Bad
This isn't even good enough for Lush or Asst. much less here
HOT
One of the better L.W. stories and of course the gay female haters attack it.
The gays here only like B.T.B stories.
I guess hub got what he deserves showing wife's hot pussy off like that gave her the green light to have some fun..now it's. Going to take wife awhile before she gets bored with that big cock.
Arousing
Arousing and so hot. Flashing a valet attendant is so much fun. Fucking him even better. 5 Stars.
Idiotic fantasy by a pubescent author!!!
What a bunch of crap!!! She is married and fucks a stranger without protection??!! You are only stupid!! Which man would be married to such a low slut!!! Only real pervert or brain sick one like you!!!
Whats next
Her demise or divorce?
Great love young guys with big cocks
Becca did it right, catch a big one and ride it hot and hard. Good story xoxoxoxo Annette
Good, but...
too fast to go from prim and proper wife to hot slut in such a short time. Story needed to be developed. Plus you had word and quotation errors.
Did anyone else see that flying saucer?
Becca never had a chance. But why did you leave that part out? Wonder how she'll explain giving syphilis to her husband? Guess we'll learn that in chapter 5? A really deep engaging plot.
Effective story telling!
Fine job! Five
Where did hubby go after that dinner and night of fucking . He disappeared from the story and she went into complete pig mode. Questions need to be answered
Horrible effort!
If you don't have the self respect to re-read, and edit your own writing, if you're only level of interest is to slap some piece of shit together and post, then you're wasting your time and your reader's time. The story made ZERO sense.
Slut
She has cheated on her husband he will find out if she is reguler with long cock.
By the way 3 1/2 inches round is only 1.1 inches diameter about average. we use to have a saying
" short and thick does the trick. long and thin only makes babies"
Stated off hot and turned out disappointing
Just another cheating Cunt with no regard for her husband. Why be married if you care so little for your spouse. She didn't even have a minuscule thought about her husband. He vanished from the story. Does he even exist? The sex was very hot but so what if it ends empty with no climax like this story. I don't think she is actually married or wants to be. No spouse with any self respect would want to be so totally disregarded like this. Disappointing ending.
Yes
Nothing like a sexy beautiful woman who is I touch with her inner slut.
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