- All
Comments (8) - Add a
Comment - Send
Feedback Send private anonymous feedback to the author (click here to post a public comment instead).
| Literotica Toy Store ADULT TOY & DVD STORE FAST & DISCREET |
Literotica XXX Webcams 24/7 LIVE CAMS - FREE PREVIEW W/AUDIO! |
Literotica Adult Movies STREAMING ADULT MOVIES PAY PER MINUTE |
English
well...
I wonder what happened next - first the custodian had an interesting evening, and then either she quit (after being arrested for public nudity) - or there was a scandal for the school.
Awful
I actually finised hoping something would happen to the boys... but no. This is rape. And this is the wrong section for it especially given the conclusion. This is dumb. I wasnt waiting for somthing stellar on the literotica website but come one how dumb are all of those people exactly ?
Wrong Category
Wrong category.
A bit juvenile
Need to develop this line of thought a bit more next time. Most girls aren't so oblivious to climb a ladder in a skirt and flash a group of boys sitting at the bottom. Plus, a simple upskirt photo or two isn't enough to cause a girl to decide to *voluntarily* lift her skirt for yet more photos.
Put a little more into her mindset. Describe more of how it makes her feel. Don't just throw "she was so humiliated." then "she came all over the floor". And what about outside of those sessions? What about at home? How did she deal with the emotions and stress? How did she try to deal with the conflict between wanting it to stop and how good those orgasms felt?
And your escalation is a bit odd. She lost her panties as she was bare bottom spanked early on, yet they didn't touch her tits and let her keep her panties on until almost the end of the story on later days?
Finally, a 30 person gang-bang is a bit over the top and is just plain rape. Why create the blackmail setup if you then just force fuck her anyway?
But don't give up. It's a good genre and I like the librarian angle (instead of just a standard teacher), but you need to develop it a little more than this attempt. Try again.
Hot but flawed
Like a few others have said, probably needs to be in a different category.
Maybe Non-consent/reluctance.
Your descriptions are very vivid and told well but the whole premise is flawed from the beginning.
The boys are going to go tell the Librarian at a Catholic school that a girl hurt them after she caught them taking pictures up her skirt?
Even high-school boys aren't that stupid.
No school is going to leave the a bunch of student in the library unsupervised after hours.
All in all, I liked it and gave it 4 stars
Very sexy scenes
I have to admit that realism is not very important to me when I read an erotic story. The descriptions here were vivid and arousing. My only suggestion would be to proof read more than once to eliminate more of the grammatical mistakes. But this story is a keeper.
My thoughts
Sploosh
Good story
Good story i would like to read more like how did she get home and did the boys keep it up and did the force her to do more things for them maybe cover her in their sperm and or piss maybe bring some girls into it to !
Click here to leave your own comment on this submission! or
Back to Library Humiliation or
More submissions by klipthealien.