Loved the build up and the twist at the end. Would love to read more about these two taking it to the next level.
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Anonymous10/23/16
Good work.
Two comments: first, there were lot of typos and they kept distracting me from the story. Second, I was surprised at your ending – it seemed an odd place to end the story.
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Please continue!
Loved the build up and the twist at the end. Would love to read more about these two taking it to the next level.
Good work.
Two comments: first, there were lot of typos and they kept distracting me from the story. Second, I was surprised at your ending – it seemed an odd place to end the story.
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