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by Anonymous

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by Anonymous10/24/16

You need an editor

Poor spelling and grammar make this ok story a chore to read.

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by trigudis10/25/16

Needs Editing

A tough read because of the many grammatical errors here.

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by Tw0Cr0ws10/25/16

sloppy

collage college
worm warm
............ and on and on.

Too many of the wrong words.
Words are the tools a writer uses, any craftsman will tell you that you get poor results from using the wrong tools.

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by Dyln_1110/26/16

Thank you!

I do understand that my illiteracy effects my writing. This is a sample to be revised upon getting an editor that will help. I hope that with my imagination and experience with out side grammatical help, I will be able to provide quality stories that make the mind lust for more.

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