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by prop6910/22/16

good story

Prefer a little less farting and more eating pussy, but still enjoyed the story

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by Anonymous10/23/16

Voice

Present tense is almost always a bad idea, with few limited exceptions. This is true for first or third party narration. Any story being told is necessarily a recount or rendering of what has happened.
Also, constructive criticism can be helpful to one who wishes to develop.

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