by Mikilove0016
It seems like you wrote this to get it out of your system... Taking on the subject of Mary and rushing into the sex seems almost sinful... no pun intended...
To some this would be considered sacrireligious. I wave my judgment on that subject. However regarding the merits of this story and your writing, I find it mediocre at best. With more practice, research and writing, you will get better and better. All the best