Not all erotica has to be non-stop fucking and sucking.
I enjoyed the story.
A good tease can be fun.
I'd work on the dialog a little bit.
It sounded a little robotic at the beginning. Kind of like a sit-com pilot where the writers have to establish every character's history in the first scene.
Still, Over all a very good story!
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Not lame at all
Not all erotica has to be non-stop fucking and sucking.
I enjoyed the story.
A good tease can be fun.
I'd work on the dialog a little bit.
It sounded a little robotic at the beginning. Kind of like a sit-com pilot where the writers have to establish every character's history in the first scene.
Still, Over all a very good story!
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