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Awesome
An awesome short story that was well-written, set the scene well, and finished with good action sequences. Very much worth the read!
chicken cordon blue!
hahahahaha!!! Don't any of you people have a dictionary?
What a nice present...
Good read .. very enjoyable.
What about Mary?
Loved this. Enough detail to keep us hooked and good description of their bonding, the backstory and the sex. Only thing is that we didn't get a great description of Mary, and it would have been something had you write Mary as being pleasantly surprised he was white, as the little "jab" seemed a bit out of place after their long conversations by phone. However, none of that's worth offing a star, so I say 5.
I know you wrote this a long time ago, but this story had the potential to really take off for multiple chapters and that would have been great, I think. :)
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