Great to see this story continuing! You've got a great talent with describing the passion of these characters, and I can't wait to see how this all resloves itself.
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Anonymous11/18/16
To be honest, I feel the story's meandering a bit. I get the feeling there's really not much left other than elaborate confessions of love, and regrets of not being able to be together, since that seemed like pretty much all that was done in this chapter. The description of the sex, is, as always wonderful, but I found myself scrolling through it just to see if something meaningful happened with respect to the actual storyline. Just a thought.
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Anonymous11/29/16
Lot of time between chapters?
When did Eileen become Elaine? Continuity is one of the functions of an editor, even if they're a volunteer. Story meandering? I suppose so. Enjoying it, I am.
I wasn't into piss fetish and public sex before reading this but now I can't believe the fun I was missing. Hottest story I've read so far. Thank you for writing!
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Welcome Back
Great to see this story continuing! You've got a great talent with describing the passion of these characters, and I can't wait to see how this all resloves itself.
To be honest, I feel the story's meandering a bit. I get the feeling there's really not much left other than elaborate confessions of love, and regrets of not being able to be together, since that seemed like pretty much all that was done in this chapter. The description of the sex, is, as always wonderful, but I found myself scrolling through it just to see if something meaningful happened with respect to the actual storyline. Just a thought.
Lot of time between chapters?
When did Eileen become Elaine? Continuity is one of the functions of an editor, even if they're a volunteer. Story meandering? I suppose so. Enjoying it, I am.
Damn!
I wasn't into piss fetish and public sex before reading this but now I can't believe the fun I was missing. Hottest story I've read so far. Thank you for writing!
Please keep them coming.
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