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I agree it was rushed,
But a pretty nice idea if you can draw it out more.
Rushed
I agree with that criticism. I was in the middle of writing something else, when this idea kept nagging at me, so I decided to quickly get it onto the page and see what people thought, even knowing it was missing a whole lot in the middle. It will join a couple other stories on the "rewrite later" pile, next to the "continue later" pile, when I've exhausted other story ideas. It might be a while, since my "Year After" multi-series, planned for 4 years, is currently in the middle of Year 2.
slow down
A little slower would be nice. having had a open heart surgery I can tell
you that things are strange when you wake up. my operation did not go
smoothly and I did not know any of the people looking at me when they came to my
room. days later I learned their names and who they were. I did not tell any one
that I did not know them. in time most of my memory came back.
Absolutely Idiotic!
Nuf said. 1*
To the anonymous emailer...
who asked why I bothered posting something I felt was worth rewriting later while I was in the midst of writing something else?
Two reasons.
1) To get feedback on the basic idea and what I HAD written;
2) To clear the idea from my head.
Sometimes writers write for their own purposes, not just their readers'.
nice idea
Just a bit short. Perhaps some research on transplantation issues could have helped. The immune system is quite an issue here and a promising hook for interesting complications. Loved it, a nice and friendly story, just too short.
I liked it.
It was cute and sweet. The idea of someone's 'soul' transferring along with their heart is not a new one, but you did it a fine service in the telling.
In the middle here.
I believe that two people can fall in love in a couple of months, but I think as a reader I deserved to get some of the story behind them discovering that love.
I also think some more erotic details would have helped me enjoy more. This could be a nice romance story.
Is there more?
Shawna and Hank have just started a life together, surely there will be more for this couple, at least i hope so. Well written and please continue to write and post here I look forward to reading more stories from you.
thanx
noel
It was ok
Transplants NEVER NEVER go like that NEVER. it does not matter if someone wants to be a transplant giver on death. ALL concerned MUST agree or it NEVER happens.If all isn't there then the transplant NEVER happens PERIOD hospitals learned quickly to neer trust a dying patients wishes without EVERYONES consent. FUCK the donor...
@sampkyang
You're saying that the organ donation option on a driver's license does NOT amount to consent, when every resource I look at says it does?
Short and Sweet
4* thanks for writing this.
Not Bad
Maybe should have been in Sci-Fi?
Minor quibble - how in the hell does he take a shower with two casts on? Sh'e certainly in no position to assist him!
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