All in all I loved the story. It was really good. Hopeful for a continuation. Just try to proof read a bit better. There were only like two maybe three mistakes.
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Anonymous11/03/16
Good story, but...
... just the slightest bit confusing. You moved back and forth between the 'current' story of Haley and Jeff, and the recounting of Jeff, Lindsey, and Dad a few times, and it made it difficult to keep track of whether Jeff is describing how it feels to be with his sister, or how it felt to have Lindsey 'attacking' him, again.
A very good story with much more potential to be written about. It seems his sister while complaining didn't hold back as her brother screwed her harder and that she likes his cum ! So, besides wanting his car again I'll bet she wants his cock much more than that and will work him hard and better. To say he should save his loads for her; is a very good sign. I'll bet she never thought he was so well hung and she will be back many times before she needs the car. Maybe, other things will happen too ??? Thank you and please write more chapters quickly.
English
Short but so VERY, VERY SWEET
Made my cock hard and wishing I was there
Yes please
I want to read some more like this
Good story, small grammar mistakes
All in all I loved the story. It was really good. Hopeful for a continuation. Just try to proof read a bit better. There were only like two maybe three mistakes.
Good story, but...
... just the slightest bit confusing. You moved back and forth between the 'current' story of Haley and Jeff, and the recounting of Jeff, Lindsey, and Dad a few times, and it made it difficult to keep track of whether Jeff is describing how it feels to be with his sister, or how it felt to have Lindsey 'attacking' him, again.
Just outstanding
This was a very good story, really enjoyed it, need more like it
A very good story with much more potential to be written about. It seems his sister while complaining didn't hold back as her brother screwed her harder and that she likes his cum ! So, besides wanting his car again I'll bet she wants his cock much more than that and will work him hard and better. To say he should save his loads for her; is a very good sign. I'll bet she never thought he was so well hung and she will be back many times before she needs the car. Maybe, other things will happen too ??? Thank you and please write more chapters quickly.
Fair Trade
Wish I had a sexy sister to trade my car for a weekend of pleasure. How about another chapter?
Wow
First time ever commenting but that was well deserved of a comment... Fantastic Story.... I could actually picture it happening
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