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Paints on Canvas

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by YDD05/25/04

Paints with words

The words flow smoothly in cadence in this poet's first offering.
The thoughts and phrases are not new,
but the final lines combine to add a fresh image.

Keep writing.


edit: "heavens" is possessive.

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by jthserra05/26/04

This one seemed like two poems

the first two stanzas worked okay together, but the last stanza became more, much stronger than the first part of the poem. The strngth of the poem is in that last stanza, if you could carry that stanza in a poem of its own it would really shine...

jim : )

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by sandspike05/27/04

Keep it coming

A nice short work showing deeper emotions than many longer
poems. It sounds like you are better off flying for awhile.
Smooth poem as it changed gears and imagery.

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