Rainy Weekend with Mom

rainy weekend with mom

too short

Needs to be longer.

The story was too short. Needs to be longer or a part 2.

Too short

Why did she have so many toys in the car?

Free Pointer:

You don't have to turn every sentence into a new paragraph. Double spacing between each sentence might stretch a really short story, but it quickly becomes annoying to read. It looked like you might have broken that annoying trend a couple times, until I actually read the "paragraph" and realized it was just a run-on sentence that would have been equally annoying except that it broke up the annoying monotony of your micro-paragraph fixation.

I'm just saying. What you seem to find "profound" isn't all that profound.

A few things

I dated and fucked mothers just like this and while the idea of their sons finding the videos make them wet they would not act on it right away but instead tell me about it. What I am getting at is this story was more like a dream that I couldn't get into. It needs more content.

ephiny jones

Get a life,Your stupid comments are longer than the story.Good story.Remember, you do not have to read the stories!!!!

almost

It had the potential to be a hot story but seemed rushed and some things just didn't make sense. You did make her sound very sexy. Don't quit writing just read your story to get the feel of it seeming possible.

Good start

I agree we need some more . You have a whole weekend to tell us about

nice

nice start! hope you finish it!

I really hope you do a continuation because this needs more, maybe a prequil from the moms perspective on what lead her to making the video, and why she wanted her son to see it, and if she made more.

Something similar...

nearly happened with our son. It had been a long-time fantasy of ours (the ex and mine) that almost became reality. We had made a video-tape of her & I (right after being married) masturbating together, each other, ALL foreplay and making love. We fantasized about showing it to our son...while our son was in the garage, we talked about (and almost did it) starting / pausing the tape on the TV. We were then going to tell him we were going to bed and ask him to close up the house before he went to bed. We knew we'd hear the TV if he un-paused it then later, hopefully, the distinct sounds of flesh slapping flesh. We were going to quietly entered the livingroom...totally naked...and stand behind him until he started to cum...then she would stand in front of him. When he opened his eyes, he would have seen his mom (shaved smooth, D-cups) straddling his legs (her lower lips parted) with her hands behind her. I would have then also stood in front of him and we would have asked if he enjoyed the movie and told him he could watch it anytime he wanted to. To this day, I believe he and his mom watched it together and have "done the deed" many times...I love that thought.

Hot?? Not!

Placeing my enormous love log in my sweaty palm I watched as she began to coax the hot nectar from her steaming honey hole.
OK for a pre teen story. But this is an adult site. Do us all a favor, don't EVER write another story. Are you 12 years old?

Male announcer: The white zone is for immediate loading and unloading of passengers only. There is no stopping in the red zone.

Female announcer: The white zone is for immediate loading and unloading of passengers only. There is no stopping in the red zone.
Male announcer: [later] The red zone is for immediate loading and unloading of passengers only. There is no stopping in the white zone.
Female announcer: No, the white zone is for loading of passengers and there is no stopping in a RED zone.
Male announcer: The red zone has always been for loading and unloading of passengers. There's never stopping in a white zone.
Female announcer: Don't you tell me which zone is for loading, and which zone is for stopping!
Male announcer: Listen Betty, don't start up with your white zone shit again.
[Later]
Male announcer: There's just no stopping in a white zone.
Female announcer: Oh really, Vernon? Why pretend, we both know perfectly well what this is about. You want me to have an abortion.
Male announcer: It's really the only sensible thing to do, if its done safely. Therapeutically there's no danger involved.

~Airplane!

(1980)

needs description

This could use a lot more detail it is more of a tease then a sex story try working on that

It would be better if the chapter was longer. But having said that I couldn't write to save my life, I've tried.

More

I agree that story was way too short and too much of a tease, but I would love to read more...much more.

To fucking short

We need part two what did cunt feel like? Did u get her rose bud? Who did what an did mom take the load or was it pull out? Did mom squirt did you eat some fine pussy? Was mom on the pill if not what happen???

A great arousing tool having a vid of Mom playing and masturbating to in the car !! The fact she caught him looking at it and jerking off was certainly a setup but she really is glad he found that. Being so descriptive in her comments means Mom will put his hard cock and big balls to great use ! We need more details of the son and what his Mom wants out of this besides a hard screwing etc. Yes, more chapters would be great as her son can more than give her what she lacks and wants. Nice start. Thank you !!

Cool start

Don't worry about the negative comments, there are many reader on here who will like this. Short , sharp and to the point with a simple little twist. But they avoid the flack by not making public comments. I suspect you will start receiving PM's
The only thing is you; now have to write some follow up or you will lose readers

way way too short, always try to make your chapters at l-2 pages.

I lIKE IT!!!

Please have a follow up! Have him bring a Black friend over to Fuck his mother since she was using a Black Dildo. He takes command of her the Black school buddy of her son. Then brings another black friend also to have a foursome. The mother becomes a Black Slut by those black boys who take control of her!! HOT Story go for it!! Or brings his Black well hung Father he takes control of her and passes her around to his other older friends! Make sure she has at least 38DD chest with Blond hair.

Just the right length

Ignore those saying it's too short, many of us prefer just one page at most. I've read at least two of your stories, both very good. Fully agree with your comments on your biography. Keep it up and keep it short. Well done

Please continue

This has a lot of potential. But, no more than a 3 part story.

Wow

Well done. :)