All Comments on 'Quiet Day at Work'

by WhiskeyInATeaCup1707

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Archie89Archie89over 7 years ago
Nice Fantasy

Even though I absolutely hate this 2nd person/present tense style, I did enjoy that little fantasy!

Impo_64Impo_64over 7 years ago
As a describing fantasy...

I also hate the 2nd person/present tense style, except when someone describing a fantasy or a dream to the other person in it...It doesn't seem the case in here...

AnonymousAnonymousover 7 years ago
Got to agree

Person and tense poblems... this may be too difficult for novice writers to pull off.

GrandPaMGrandPaMover 7 years ago
this is a rare treat...

a 2nd-person scene I ca appreciate.

These are few and far between.

Kudos for pulling off this kinky little fantasy story.

4*

SkanderbegSkanderbegover 7 years ago
Very good.

I really enjoyed this one, you show a lot of promise and I look forward to reading more from you.

26thNC26thNCalmost 3 years ago

A threesome at work piece of shit non story.

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