by WhiskeyInATeaCup1707
Even though I absolutely hate this 2nd person/present tense style, I did enjoy that little fantasy!
I also hate the 2nd person/present tense style, except when someone describing a fantasy or a dream to the other person in it...It doesn't seem the case in here...
Person and tense poblems... this may be too difficult for novice writers to pull off.
a 2nd-person scene I ca appreciate.
These are few and far between.
Kudos for pulling off this kinky little fantasy story.
4*
I really enjoyed this one, you show a lot of promise and I look forward to reading more from you.