Well done with a meaningful plot, well described characters, and a hot sex scene. It was well written and believable. It is worthy of a second story.
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Anonymous11/07/16
The Cell Phone Lot
"Surprised at her willingness to join me in my car, I was happy to oblige and I scurried to move the accumulation of mail, CD jewel cases, and a newspaper that was stacked in the passenger seat." You're waiting for your wife and haven't cleared the mail? sounds strange. Now if your wife is an exhibitionist, I can see making her wait at the curb while you move stuff, but this isn't the case. It doesn't fit your story.
You're both about 75 miles from home and considering driving home waiting for the flight to arrive? Never mind that 2 hours for Delta is six hours, but why put that thought here?
Every detail needs a reason to be here.
I've spent hours in the cell lot over the years, and have yet to meet any ladies there. But this story gives me hope for the future! Wonderful story, we're hoping we get the rest of it soon. 5 * from me.
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Enjoyed Story
When I use the cell phone lot I will remember this story. I assume there is at least another chapter coming.
Cell Phone Lot
Well done with a meaningful plot, well described characters, and a hot sex scene. It was well written and believable. It is worthy of a second story.
The Cell Phone Lot
"Surprised at her willingness to join me in my car, I was happy to oblige and I scurried to move the accumulation of mail, CD jewel cases, and a newspaper that was stacked in the passenger seat." You're waiting for your wife and haven't cleared the mail? sounds strange. Now if your wife is an exhibitionist, I can see making her wait at the curb while you move stuff, but this isn't the case. It doesn't fit your story.
You're both about 75 miles from home and considering driving home waiting for the flight to arrive? Never mind that 2 hours for Delta is six hours, but why put that thought here?
Every detail needs a reason to be here.
Cell lot
I've spent hours in the cell lot over the years, and have yet to meet any ladies there. But this story gives me hope for the future! Wonderful story, we're hoping we get the rest of it soon. 5 * from me.
Very well written.
Enjoyed the story. Thank you.
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