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by Anonymous

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by Anonymous11/07/16

Not sure about this story but I'll be looking for the next chapter to see how it goes, be nice if it's a longer chapter though.

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by hardheadd111/07/16

???

Okaaaaay. You got my attention. So wondering what's next?

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by Anonymous11/08/16

Editing

Good start, but tenses were very inconsistent and even changed within a sentence. There were some other minor errors but that was the biggest one that broke the flow of the story.

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