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Good Read***

Thanks for sharing.

Astounded the story stayed as lucid as it did as long as it did

The plot was just silly. The subplots like mental health, Asperger's which the narrator clearly seems to have a case of ( although it wasn't overtly mentioned ) , corporate power plays and humor excelled. Things got frenetic at the end, but by then I felt mostly relief in same way I feel getting off state of the art , fiendishly exhilarating roller coaster, equally entertained but exhausted.

Great story......so enjoyable!

The author did well on this story.
This story is very creative, well written, great context and so enjoyable reading all the way through.
Congrats to the author!.....well done!

AL DOESNT REALIZE HOW LUCKY HE IS

and Tom Tom just might explain it to them some day, TK U MLJ LV NV

OH YEAH

On a night when my and many lives will be changed by the result of a madman achieving the top job this tale made me smile. Extreme revenge or vengeance, whatever you want to call it, is something I cannot achieve in my life. However, here we have a man who took it to the nth degree. I could go into a lot of expletives but I won't. If you read the tale instead of skimming and condemning you will see. By the way, there is no god. This was proven tonight.

Well, maybe not. But my faith is shaken.

Five Stars and a fav

Good job

Excellent writing 4****,thx for sharing

Good read

5* for a nice story. But cab/Tom is still an ass. Socially inept...lol...how about insane. You would think the counsellor from his college days would have picked up on that and helped him with his anger management issue's. I guess you should never make him mad at you for any reason. He might just lash out for a minor slight and take vengeance on you.
Still a good read though. Thank you.

What's a better cure for anger than revenge?

Thought this ended rather abruptly, and would have been more satisfying if wehad gotten more than a second-hand telling of Lila and Al's misfortunes at the end.

I don't know...

I don't know about the rest of you but I felt it ended without the feel that it ended. Too sudden without the real good down in the gut feel that the bitch and bastard got burned.

The story never pulled me in like I hoped. I felt socially disconnected during the reading.

Like I said, "I don't know..."

Thoughts

“I really, really need this job” – Big deal! She’s going to be getting two YEARS pay, plus if she’s so qualified she should have no problem getting a new job.

“he convinced her to dump me in the cruel way that she had” – She’s that much of a cunt that she would go along with such a cruel act?

Lila loves her husband enough to humiliate herself for him, then cheats on him?

I certainly don’t feel bad for Al! He was not only directly responsible for Lila breaking up with Tom but the heartless way she did it!

gave it a 5 and hope you add a chapter.
thanks

Very good

Just feels incomplete?

Further Thought

Why should her transfer and Al not getting the technology affect their divorce? Does he need her that badly? Couldn't he possibly sue the company to get on the list because of Jackson's apparent sexual harassment?

And why do he and Carolyn want to hide their involvement in exposing the cheating?

****.*

Kept looking for a page 4.

The reason Tom and Carolyn need to hide their involvement are:

the adverse effect it would have on Brit; filming them without their permission is illegal; and it would adversely affect how management viewed them since even though managers did what they had to I doubt that they liked it.
I find it odd that others think this story needs more. What more does it need? I think there is a complete conclusion.
Also, I found no indication that Tom seeks revenge for petty injustices -- just major ones.
Also, since this is a first person account, how can Tom know the details of what happens between Al and Lila? Al certainly does need Lila after being removed from the list to get early access to the biomechanical devices.
I liked the story lots!

Made me smile!

Karma is real, you get back what you put in. I love it when a plan comes together, and the guilty pay!

Nice story, appropriate revenge

Good story, sounds like no innocents were harmed. And Tom did less to then than they did too him, so it wasn't some over the top thing. I was worried by description, but this was good. Thanks!

NEXT CHAPTER

IT WAS A GOOD START ,YOU COULD GO MUCH FARTHER , WITH THE YOUNGER SISTER.....

Smooth for an autistic lad.

He does seem to caught on to how to influence other people and grand children are a good substitute for children.

I think it ended just fine .

I don't think it needs anymore, It was a good story and I think that is what others want..... More of a good story. Five from me. Thank you for your skill at telling a tale.

don't try this at home.

Only one reservation

I really liked this story, but I do have one reservation.

The companion to
"Is a bear Catholic?"
is
"Does the pope shit in the woods?"

Thanks for sharing.

So many characters to dislike.

Not sure if I read the same story as the rest of you. i found the story preposterous, the dialog stilted and the characters flat.

Main character started off ok. But then has a screaming hissy fit because someone who was mean to him starts working in his department. Proceeds to humiliate that person and blackmail her mother, a woman he claims to be fond of, into sex. You can claim it was not blackmail but he had a clear position of power over her and took advantage of that BEFORE he provided any help or even a promise to help.

Naturally, the woman that hurt him proves to be a slut, cheating on and disrespecting the man she was humiliating herself to protect less than a year before.

And our "hero?" Takes joy in knowing that man will remain crippled. Since the woman who decided to hurt him years ago told the mother the self serving tale of it being his idea, it had to be his fault that Cab suffered for a few of weeks. She wouldn't have lied would she?

This seemed more a vehicle for expressing some joy from hurting people than a coherent story. All it was missing was having Cab having a magnifying glass and an ant hill.

Good

I thoroughly enjoyed the protagonist. He's interesting. Thanks for the good read.

Very well written...

Very well written...about the story and the characters: He is a drastic character when revenge is necessary...But he has one big detail in his favour: even fate was on his side! Lila's husband become paraplegic and his hand wasn't in it...So if fate was on his side who are we to disagree? 4*

Didn't care for it much....

Cab/Tom is not a sympathetic character despite his alleged autism- a neurological disorder. Troubling to me is his apparent Borderline Personality Disorder and his total disregard for any of the characters in the story, including Brit.

Revenge stories pretty much leave me cold, as did this one. Tom looks like a sociopath to me. The writing seemed stilted without any real character development that I can see. All in all, this story was not worth the time that I put into it. Of course I'm just one voice and others have and will like the story.

In my view there isn't much "there", there.

Hmmmmm

Tom is a freak - can't rebound from a college romance from someone he wasn't even married to. Get over it, weirdo! You've done better work.

This was truly weird fun!

I loved the messed up protagonist and his path was twisted as well as entertaining.

I only wish you would have written more in depth confrontations between him and Christine.

I would have appreciated more insight from Christine's point of view.

Still 5*.

@Brewtoo

It wasn't just the end of the romance but HOW it ended!

She couldn't even tell him to his face, not even take his calls.

She admits to going out of her way to hurt him.

your own call if it was over the top. However..

My view? He put his goodness to those who treated him/others right. He put his 'revenge' to those who were jerks. Over the top? Nah. Karma. YES.

Why read revenge stories if they leave you cold?

foolscap - seems sort of silly to read a story that is prefaced with "my sense of revenge may be over blown" and then complain mentioning that revenge stories leave you cold. Do you like wasting your time and ours?

Story was pretty good, just unfinished

Ace story

Hawt

Apprehensive.

I was apprehensive about reading this story because I don't care for BTB stories. Since he wasn't married to the bitch, the story line worked out ok for me and I actually enjoyed it very much.

Yes, the writing was a little "stilted,"

But I took it to be how our "stilted" hero thinks and talks. His borderline autism is thus constantly but softly in the forefront of our minds as we read. Genius.
I don't think that the revenge was over the top at all, but Karma sure got a big assist from our hero, didn't it?
Really good story, not quite as good as your first, though. Still plenty good enough to get 5 shiny ones from me.
And, I'm greedily looking forward to your next one!
Big K

LW or Humor/Satire?

Why did he learn a martial art? It is not used in this tale, despite the option being viable over three times? Just a little over the top (like a mile or two!) so it MUST be a satire on BTB accounts!

3*. The account of Hap< must have been hacked!

But why...

Nice straightforward revenge tale, but I wish there was more insight into his ex girlfriend's douchebag behavior- being convinced to cut him off entirely doesn't wash, since anyone with a few brain cells of compassion couldn't do that, and if she was really such a bitch he might have picked up on that early- of course his autism might have prevented that, but I wonder how her family could tolerate that behavior. She apologized way after the fact when she was forced to, but I didn't get much remorse from her, and when she was caught with Jackson she should have had a satisfying scene with Cab where her life turned to crap and she knew why. The fact that I am having all these uncharitable ideas reflects how much I got into the revenge thing- the story got under my skin, as it was meant to.

Unlikeable Hero

I find it difficult to engage with a story where the main character is a sociopath unless it is written for laughs. I don't think that was your aim.

they were young

and not married when she left him, it happens! no need for such extreme vengeance?
main character was not likeable. if christinas betrayal had gone much deeper and been better explained the story would have been much better.

Cinco Estrellas!

It was outstanding! Thus always to cheaters!

Perspective...

It wasn't as if he lost one friend out of dozens or had her say "just not cutting it; sorry".

She dumped him in a way that was so bad that even her family was "what the fuck?"

If she had lost her job, he didn't MAKE them fire her - he just made them choose and it wasn't HER they'd have picked.

You could see he wasn't as big an asshole as you'd like to think - he didn't burn Brit to hurt the daughter even more.

Funny thing is, "Lila" deserved to be destroyed even MORE when he found out she'd done what her bf asked and broke it off with him INTENTIONALLY in the cruelest way they could think of.
Too bad he's unlikely to tell Al or Lila that HE was directly responsible for the DVDs...

Britt's broken promise

seems like Britt broke her promise to call Cab/Tom when she found out why Christina broke up with him in such a cruel way.
Though she definitely seems to have made up for it by making Tom happier than her daughter ever did.

Well Deserved Revenge - Outstanding Story!

The intro phrase for this story "If you have a weak stomach for vengeance, don't read this." greatly overstated Tom/Cab's revenge. When you look at his actions toward Lila they were both honest and honorable. She treated him in a very cruel and despicable manner which you may say was due to her youth but she never tried to make it right by contacting him to say she was sorry. She knew that absent her and his parent Tom/Cab had no one. So Tom/Cab was wholly in his rights to have no contact ever with her and sharing the truth of her work affair revealed her to be a hypocrite (she had made this case how important the job was to her family but our actions threatened not only her marriage but her family). It will be interesting when Al and Lila's kids grow up and how Brit and Tom will attend their life events.

very good story

My only complaint about this was that it seemed like the ending was a bit rushed. While Lila's POV may have been interesting, it was not needed. To do what she did, in the manner in which she did, she deserved a whole lot more. I did not notice when this was written, however, a sequel while not needed would be nice.

Great!

Five Stars!

First rate story and first rate story telling

I Love a happy ending!