This feels pretty rushed if you ask me. The pacing of the story is a little jittery half way and it doesn't help that there isn't much character descriptions. There's also typos but, meh. I don't know about you, but a sequel or something could benefit from what's already here, would just need to add on to it.
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Fast and bumpy
This feels pretty rushed if you ask me. The pacing of the story is a little jittery half way and it doesn't help that there isn't much character descriptions. There's also typos but, meh. I don't know about you, but a sequel or something could benefit from what's already here, would just need to add on to it.
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