That First Night Ch. 00c

Sweet yet again

I absolutely love these small vignettes, they pack a lot of character of the main story but coat it in sweet layer of the time before their feelings were completely open to each other. The final pikatchu gift is probably the tipping point for her, though she obviously already did feel at least something before then.

5* and keeping my fingers crossed that ch. 11 is soon on its way.

@Anon

I'm going to start on Chapter 11 sometime after Thanksgiving (the inspiration for this series is coming in town, so of course that takes precedence).

There are a few different directions I'm thinking about taking the next chapter. I can say for sure that Ashley's father is going to show up. In what capacity and for what reason is TBD.

Awesome stuff, loved every bit of it

The detail in this chapotee enriched the story quite a bit, perhaps you can do the same for the other chapter, however, since I've fallen in love with the story between these two love birds, I think that you should not limit the story to 12 chapters (I'd cry if you did, like if you made a book about these two I'd buy it no question) maybe have them go on more adventures, and then get to the point of their marriage, sort of to build the intensity and then go from there. Overall I give you props for the amazing narrative, the way you convey the story, it's just...OMG JUST DONT STOP lol, when I tell ya that you won't run out of an audience I mean it completely, ever since I started reading and finished reading it up until the latest chapter, I've been like checking to see if you had uploaded, to be honest every 2 days, maybe even more often that that. Anyway, great stuff and yeah...oh by the way, I feel like you read my previous comment, because I suggested that you should add stuff where they sort of rant about their love for each other, I guess since this is before it all goes down, you haven't added it, but I'd be amazing if you did, like having a scene where they lay in bed and just talk like crazy lovebirds and perhaps even give us more details about the 2. Wow I really need to stop lol, what an essay I've written hahaha, that goes to show how dearly I appreciate this whole love story, keep it up

not aginst the law

ok so this part annoyed me its not actually against the law to marry your cousin in Texas. that im aware of

@ law anon

Sadly, it actually is against the law to marry first cousins in Texas under the Texas Family Code.

Marriages consummated in other states that allow cousin marriage are not seen as valid marriages in Texas, and the only type of marriage that is allowed is between first cousins once removed.

Most states allow you to marry your first cousin including CT. You CANT however marry your parent, step parent, grandparent, sibling, Aunt, Uncle.

Lovely and Romantic

looking forward to the next chapter