For a published writer...where's the forshadowing?
Maybe MIL is a twist, but there shouldn't be in this tale.
Two women and suddenly, "She knows about us," doesn't quite work.
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Anonymous11/19/16
huh
Your writing is ok, but you need to explain things. What did who figure out?
by
Anonymous11/19/16
A nice little follow-up
Sorry to say this, but if the 2 anonymi had clicked on the author's name they would have found, in the list of cyburlookur's other contributions, a 2 part story called (small roll of drums) Fucking My Mother in Law … Same personnel as in this offering, but this one's a nice short little follow-up story.
Easy when you know how, just wait till you see the whites of their eyes!
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stuck in the middle
For a published writer...where's the forshadowing?
Maybe MIL is a twist, but there shouldn't be in this tale.
Two women and suddenly, "She knows about us," doesn't quite work.
huh
Your writing is ok, but you need to explain things. What did who figure out?
A nice little follow-up
Sorry to say this, but if the 2 anonymi had clicked on the author's name they would have found, in the list of cyburlookur's other contributions, a 2 part story called (small roll of drums) Fucking My Mother in Law … Same personnel as in this offering, but this one's a nice short little follow-up story.
Easy when you know how, just wait till you see the whites of their eyes!
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