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Part 1?
Your writing's not bad (more proofreading would be a good idea though) but please mark the story as being the first of a series if that's what you're planning. It's a good start but just that...a start. I imagine most readers would prefer to know that going in.
Can't wait for Chapter 2!
I agree
I agree with the pervious comments. This is a good start however it levs. Want now?
MORE?
Would like more of Angle, away from the tattoo store and some action is badly needed.
Monotonous and in need of serious editing.
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