Curing a Kleptomaniac Ch. 02

For a few seconds there it looked like improving

but it's still just a lousy wimp husband story.
Shame from an author who can do so much better

Wimp with (a little) backbone

This was better then Chap 1, still, I want to see hubby really take addvantage of his subby wife.

She is right!....

Tim is a sick fuck!....and a lousy blackmailer and a wanna-be Master.

Come on HDK! You can do better than this!

Please...no more

HDK: The first installment should have been the only one. Please let this story die a natural death. Further additions to it will only make it even worse.

JUST GOT TO BE WIMP

WIMPY STORIES ARE FOR BI,FAG,OR PUSSYBOYS.PLEASE GIVE US THE STORIES OF A MAN ,FOR A MAN DON'T WATCH ANOTHER FUCK HIS WIFE AND SOUND STUPID.

I think I have come up with the reason..

for this story. HDK is trying to reach the more mainstream readers on this site. You know, the thousands (millions?) that all say they want to watch their spouse fuck someone else. He figures that being super popular with a select group of wimp husband/slut-wife story-haters isn't enough. Or he is writing a story about a complete and utter idiot husband. Or the author has lost his freakin' mind. Or someone is mind-contolling the author (probably one of the wimp husband story writers)(Rhinotoons, is that you?)Whatever the reason, this story is heading to the great crap-hole of sludge normally associated with the Loving wives section.

A new angle, well done.

Different slant for a story line. I have actually heard of something like this plot in real life. well done.

As for those, with an IQ of a box-of-rocks, who wrote to piss on your story, one would wonder why they ever read any stories here. Do they wander through all the story sections, except romance, displaying for all that they are but skunk smell on the wind.

Superb

Excellent story. Can't believe how good it is, and how much I enjoyed Donna and Tim getting it on under these curcumstances. To those who wrote the nasty comments, well, go read Redbook or Cosmo or whatever it is you really like.

Good

Keep up the good work! I agree with Softly, if they don't like this kind of story, why do they read it. Guess some people just need to "vent".

Once again,

why write this trash? At the beginning of chapter two I thought that he was going to stand up for himself but once again he proved to be a wimp by watching his slut wife fuck another stranger.

Come on now, you can do better than this.

TIM PROBLEM IS AS BAD AS HIS WIFE

YOU WATCH ANOTHER MAN FUCK YOUR WIFE AND GET BAD AT HIM.HE NEED TO FUCK HER UNTIL YOU STOP IT DUMBY.MRS. BECKER WAS SMART ONE IN THIS STORY.THE DUMBY SO STUPID HE FILM IT .

Why did he watch again?

Well you blew it! You could have saved this story by teaching her a lesson and turning her more submissive for only her husband. But again why wait around and watch? Her husband is a total wimp. This kind of stuff in the Loving wives category is total bullshit and uncalled for. I am glad that this is an earlier story because your later stories are heads above this crap.
Sexmate

Create!!

When a public reacts in passionate terms to something you have created, you know you've at least engaged them in the characters realities enough be emotionally effected to the point of bitching when they don't like what happens in the tale.


SO character creation you've got... and who says you write to please anything but your own subconsious? If audience IS a part of your priorities, you've just been feed a fattening fan arsenal.

Good luck!

...

Not all stories need to turn out 'right'. Not all characters, even when they're the primary ones, need to be likeable. To be honest, I read far too many stories in which the characters are too ideal; it's just not realistic. I mean, it's true the main character was a wimp, and quite twisted.. but that WAS his character. People arn't perfect, people arn't even consistent. I enjoyed the story for what it was - a story. If you don't like it, that's fine. Don't read it. If your gonna comment, criticise things that actually need improved or changed, not the story itself.
And the idiots posting, in all caps, half coherent gibberish I don't even know where to start on..

Need your characters

I need to borrow all your characters from this story, I have a "live fire" exercise and need live targets....oh, you're invited too, you wimpy ass sick fuck.

This Segment Was a Little Better

My version of the husband's reply to Mrs Becker:" Sick? I'm not the sick one here! This tape was from a "Nanny-Cam" that I had set up for home-security purposes. My wife doesn't know about this, as I have a had a few concerns about her loyalty to me, and I seem to be correct. Now:what are we going to do here? I just wanted to give you a head's up BEFORE I go to the DA and the cops with this, not to mention the store your husband was working for. After all, I may have a lousy wife, but I will never kick a gift horse in the mouth. Oh; let your hubby know that it was me who beat his friend half to death today with my bat as he raped my wife ON YOUR HUSBAND'S RECOMMENDATION. AND I GOT THAT LITTLE DICKED ASSHOLE ON TAPE TOO!".
And my wife is in the ER for the second time in two days getting a rape kit done, and the cops aren't waiting for anything on this one, now."
"Now that I have had the decency to warn you for your sake and the sake of your children, if any, wht do you need from me to help YOU?".

Not one of your ...

... better stories but I like your style.
Nucleus

What cure?

Given the title of the story, I expected a cure for Ann's kleptomania. I was wrong b/c the author invested no time in that. What he provided was a wife-watching wimp story, intermixed with multiple bouts of infidelity which I hadn't expected. I found the offering tasteless, the characters unrealistic and the plot threadbare.

This is not one of HDK's better efforts.

what twist ?

You have done better HDK. I don't really want to comment too much on the characters you presented us with, but the saying "two wrongs don't .." is still valid. I don't see the "cure" here helping, let alone the "twist". Frankly, I don't care about being whatever the readers call him or her, but what kind of marriage is it and will it be in the future. He says to still love her very much but what will the future hold : mutual cheating and/or abuse? what about trust ? No, apart of your fluent writing, I don't like this story very much. I would rather have gone for the straight revenge. Becker's wife was warned, she could take Becker to the traditional cleaners, I would destroy his business and go for a closed hearing (if at all possible) so the identity of his wife was not revealed but he would no longer be in a position to do the same to others. If on the other habnd all had to become public knowledge, too bad for his unfaithful wife. Maybe you can write another conclusion. G.Belgium

Another sick minded wimp and a slut wife

I wonder who's the sickest the husband or his slut wife?

I sense more chapters are/should be in the works?

I usually don't like dom/sub stories, but this held me enough to read both chapters. AND left me wanting you to deliver " the rest of the story " ; What's the CURE ?

Sorry HDK!

Sorry HDK! You are one of the best authors on this site but this wasn't one of your better efforts!

no no

no this is horrible

Well, Well

Not too bad for me. I do agree with "Anonymous in Brooklyn". Also I think hubby should have stopped tapping before she agreed to any sex. Then he could have come in to save the day and blackmailed him with his footage. Definately, he should never have slept with the blackmailer's wife. They could still use that footage to blackmail hubby and still take his wife....hmmmm. He should have just come to the blackmailer and took the bat to him. Could you ever really trust her to be yours after that?

Pathetic !!

You should stick to the lightweight stuff you usually write, you fucking wimp.

Hard to Believe!

It's hard to believe that a fine writer like HDK wrote garbage like this 5 years ago' Thank God he improved.
60 year old George

That was different

I'm not sure what to say about this story. It was pretty hot in some respects, but just weird and yes, sick too. But I did enjoy it. Oh well, to each his own. The only thing it needs is an ending.

Ugh!

Just...UGH. I hated all the characters. I hated the ridiculous premise. I hated the inanity of it.

You can do better then this!

THE MEN ARE ALL GAY ASSED WIMPS AND THE WOMEN AINT GOT A BRAINCELL BETWEEN THEM

Well, That Was Just

PITIFUL!!!!!!!

So now this guy is just going to go through life letting every stranger that comes to the door fuck his wife, bust a nut himself and then get some revenge? What a fucked-up dipshit in a fucked up story. He deserves the full serving of HIV and STDs.

How about writing stories that have at least one likeable person.

not as pitiful

as your life it seems. Another HDK lark much after the fashion of The Honeymooners or other sketch comedy. Way over the top, outlandish, crazy and downright silly. Monty Pytho-esque. Of course a clueless cuck couldn't comprehend, thankfully most of us have a sense of humor and realize this is fiction; lucky for us.

Sorry, 3

I do like your short stories. But, I like more conflict than that and the story just needs to be longer and more dramatic with conclusions drawn. You could have made it in to a real suspenseful write. I would like to see where this work could have gone......I should have gave you a 5 but you switched dicks in the middle of a screw, lol.....bill

Wimpy Cuck Part Two

Okay, bad enough he watched first offense, but then he re-takes control of his wife just to let her submit to ANOTHER asshole?

Not in this life!

One More Thing

I suppose we should be glad that more than 10 years have gone by with no Part 3!

Pathetic

Pathetic