Is she really hypnotized or pretending so she can have her son without guilt.
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Anonymous11/25/16
Eh
Hypnosis stories are like backseat sitting on lap stories just way over done. However well written so to be fair I gave you a 3.
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Anonymous11/25/16
great story
to the person who said about her swallowing, how do you not know that swallowing is part of how this mother would suck her a cock herself, she was told you blow him so she would do the way she would normally do it. i hope in future chapters he will use his mom to bring her friends and other women over to over them a way to help with there bad habits, by telling them her son can use hypnosis to help them, the whole time he is making his harem.
i have done hypnosis and i mean sex hypnosis. my one problem with this story
is not knowing the mother's true feelings about incest. yes she told her son it was wrong, but is she the type of woman who truly believe it is wrong or is she the type that only said it because she did not want her son to know she has looked at him or fantasize about him. that one question plays into if it would be that easy to hypnotize her as easily in this story.
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Anonymous11/25/16
grammar, please
Good story, please continue. Look into the differences between the words "your" and "you're".
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Anonymous11/25/16
Fun story, but...
I've been reading a bit about erotic hypnotism and related topics recently, and while I don't doubt that the results described in the story could be accomplished, I don't think it would happen quite so quickly. It would probably take at least several sessions of working her to the deeper levels of trance and then repeating multiple times the changes he was trying to implant. He might just begin by changing the values that precede the changes, then implanting the suggested changes as being acceptable. Finally, getting her hypnotic participation, perhaps by the use of a repeated mantra which reinforces her changed state of mind would accompany the final transition to living out the changes.
Some of the comments are funny. I'm writing about fantasy. It has nothing to do with reality. If you want a longer story, write one. If your a grammar Nazi, go be an English teacher. I use this site to get off with MY fantasies. You all just get to take a look.
You can claim you "don't care" for what you refer to as "grammar nazis", but I suspect your actual issue is stemming from an inability to spell correctly. What are the choices? That you know how to spell words correctly, but "choose not to"? Or that you're a poor writer who relies too heavily on spell check?
More to the point, referring to your shitty writing ability, it seems that in addition to misspelled words, you also couldn't properly punctuate a sentence if your life depended on it. I mean, what do you do? Type a paragraph, sneeze, then insert commas and shit wherever your snot is glistening on your monitor?
Has it occurred to you that someone might read your story, someone even moderately well-educated, and read the line: "This website, certainly got the wheels turning in my head and is why I'll never be a super hero, it's entirely too easy to abuse power." That person would then wonder why the fuck you dropped a comma after website but didn't drop one after head. Or why you used another comma after "hero" instead of a colon or even a semicolon.
It's around then that they'll probably (and accurately) conclude you're just a shitty writer.
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Anonymous11/26/16
Grammar Nazi's?
I like this story very much. But you DO need to improve your writing skills. Do not be angry at the "Grammar Nazi's". It is Language that we use to express ourselves. Tell stories, sing songs, put forth ideas, tell of our dreams. We each have a responsibility to at least try to do it right. Grammar and Composition, Spelling, and Punctuation are things that a person putting stories down in writing should be especially careful of. Spellcheck is not a good thing. It falsely gives you the feeling that you are no longer responsible for your knowledge. The computer CAN tell you whether you have spelled the word correctly or not. The computer CANNOT tell you whether you have USED THE WORD correctly or not. I like your fantasy, but do not invite comment if it is going to be wasted on you. Those who don't care, don't write.
Awesome short story with a promise of more to cum. I myself prefer a short 2 page story as compared to the 5 + novel like fantasy pages and then having to wait 3 or 4 months, sometimes up to and beyond a year for the next chapter.
So instead of berating a writer for a few mis-spelled words, mis-placed punctuation. Why not thank the Writer for the short story and offer encouragement to write the next 2 pages of the story. Being grateful that someone was willing to invite you into his fantasy...
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Anonymous11/27/16
Let me guess :))
You're.. 14-year-old? - Noo.. you are 13th years?
I'm right? :))
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Anonymous11/27/16
Ignore any that bash you for your writing skills
Seriously they can walk off a bridge, take the ones that give you feed back to improve your stories & how you write them. I stopped caring about grammar and spelling myself, then again I've had 5 major strokes and 15 minor so I really don't care either way! ^_^ Something if you feel it haven't seen them mentioned much on here but find a nice editor to help you some other sites have open story lists where the new writers post and the guys with time that like helping authors write edit and redefine the author's work so these puppies aren't trying to push out their chest over something as simple as switching he/she (very common error hence used it)
Either way good start keep it coming, need work on intro but let's face it only veteran writers have good intros, haha 4/5 for your thought on how to carry it threw so far, almost 3 due to I felt it was short. Your opening line was lacking but as you write as I said it will get better, keep em cumming. KIA
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Anonymous11/28/16
Amazing
Amazing. Cant wait for following chapters
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Anonymous11/28/16
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Don't forget to fuck mom in her tiny, crinkly, stinky asshole!
English
She swallowed her son's semen even without being instructed to under hypnosis. Such a loving mother.
Perfect mother
Is she really hypnotized or pretending so she can have her son without guilt.
Eh
Hypnosis stories are like backseat sitting on lap stories just way over done. However well written so to be fair I gave you a 3.
great story
to the person who said about her swallowing, how do you not know that swallowing is part of how this mother would suck her a cock herself, she was told you blow him so she would do the way she would normally do it. i hope in future chapters he will use his mom to bring her friends and other women over to over them a way to help with there bad habits, by telling them her son can use hypnosis to help them, the whole time he is making his harem.
my one problem is
i have done hypnosis and i mean sex hypnosis. my one problem with this story
is not knowing the mother's true feelings about incest. yes she told her son it was wrong, but is she the type of woman who truly believe it is wrong or is she the type that only said it because she did not want her son to know she has looked at him or fantasize about him. that one question plays into if it would be that easy to hypnotize her as easily in this story.
grammar, please
Good story, please continue. Look into the differences between the words "your" and "you're".
Fun story, but...
I've been reading a bit about erotic hypnotism and related topics recently, and while I don't doubt that the results described in the story could be accomplished, I don't think it would happen quite so quickly. It would probably take at least several sessions of working her to the deeper levels of trance and then repeating multiple times the changes he was trying to implant. He might just begin by changing the values that precede the changes, then implanting the suggested changes as being acceptable. Finally, getting her hypnotic participation, perhaps by the use of a repeated mantra which reinforces her changed state of mind would accompany the final transition to living out the changes.
Good story BUT
Too quick to the point :(
wow
please tell me about the website you used, if its real and works i want to use it!!!
why?
why didn't you just write a full story ? one page is nothing, it gets a 1.
Not bad
A pretty good start. I hope that you will continue with this story.
Writer
Some of the comments are funny. I'm writing about fantasy. It has nothing to do with reality. If you want a longer story, write one. If your a grammar Nazi, go be an English teacher. I use this site to get off with MY fantasies. You all just get to take a look.
Spelling-Schmelling
You can claim you "don't care" for what you refer to as "grammar nazis", but I suspect your actual issue is stemming from an inability to spell correctly. What are the choices? That you know how to spell words correctly, but "choose not to"? Or that you're a poor writer who relies too heavily on spell check?
More to the point, referring to your shitty writing ability, it seems that in addition to misspelled words, you also couldn't properly punctuate a sentence if your life depended on it. I mean, what do you do? Type a paragraph, sneeze, then insert commas and shit wherever your snot is glistening on your monitor?
Has it occurred to you that someone might read your story, someone even moderately well-educated, and read the line: "This website, certainly got the wheels turning in my head and is why I'll never be a super hero, it's entirely too easy to abuse power." That person would then wonder why the fuck you dropped a comma after website but didn't drop one after head. Or why you used another comma after "hero" instead of a colon or even a semicolon.
It's around then that they'll probably (and accurately) conclude you're just a shitty writer.
Grammar Nazi's?
I like this story very much. But you DO need to improve your writing skills. Do not be angry at the "Grammar Nazi's". It is Language that we use to express ourselves. Tell stories, sing songs, put forth ideas, tell of our dreams. We each have a responsibility to at least try to do it right. Grammar and Composition, Spelling, and Punctuation are things that a person putting stories down in writing should be especially careful of. Spellcheck is not a good thing. It falsely gives you the feeling that you are no longer responsible for your knowledge. The computer CAN tell you whether you have spelled the word correctly or not. The computer CANNOT tell you whether you have USED THE WORD correctly or not. I like your fantasy, but do not invite comment if it is going to be wasted on you. Those who don't care, don't write.
Too short
Good idea of a story but too short and not much of a build up, needs more umph or something but im no writer just a resder, cheers
Give the Writer a Break
Awesome short story with a promise of more to cum. I myself prefer a short 2 page story as compared to the 5 + novel like fantasy pages and then having to wait 3 or 4 months, sometimes up to and beyond a year for the next chapter.
So instead of berating a writer for a few mis-spelled words, mis-placed punctuation. Why not thank the Writer for the short story and offer encouragement to write the next 2 pages of the story. Being grateful that someone was willing to invite you into his fantasy...
Let me guess :))
You're.. 14-year-old? - Noo.. you are 13th years?
I'm right? :))
Ignore any that bash you for your writing skills
Seriously they can walk off a bridge, take the ones that give you feed back to improve your stories & how you write them. I stopped caring about grammar and spelling myself, then again I've had 5 major strokes and 15 minor so I really don't care either way! ^_^ Something if you feel it haven't seen them mentioned much on here but find a nice editor to help you some other sites have open story lists where the new writers post and the guys with time that like helping authors write edit and redefine the author's work so these puppies aren't trying to push out their chest over something as simple as switching he/she (very common error hence used it)
Either way good start keep it coming, need work on intro but let's face it only veteran writers have good intros, haha 4/5 for your thought on how to carry it threw so far, almost 3 due to I felt it was short. Your opening line was lacking but as you write as I said it will get better, keep em cumming. KIA
Amazing
Amazing. Cant wait for following chapters
* * * * *
Don't forget to fuck mom in her tiny, crinkly, stinky asshole!
hott.
share her with your friends after you fuck her,
great story
please keep it a mom-son thing and bring please no other men in the story
Keep 'em coming!
C'mon mate we need another ;)
Keep it up though
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