The Little Boy at the Grocery Store Ch. 03

I'm guessing that English is not your first language as there is some slightly awkward phrasing in the story. In my opinion there is a little too much detail in this chapter and it keeps the story from flowing as well as it could. Not saying it is bad, just a bit too much, but looking forward to the next chapter.

So I see you delete comments when they call out obvious mistakes like he is her son (chapter 1) to nephew (chapter 3). You don't want them pointed out, be more careful with those sort of details. And changing James name to Jerry?

The story continues to be great!

I still like the story. The feeling of advancement in the relationship between James and Jill, the acceptance of James by Jon, I find very pleasant.
References to sex remain soft, not abusive.
However, I must tell the author to watch over his texts, in this chapter, he has changed the name of James by Jerry, and the name of Jill by Kay. That is not too serious, but it would be good for the author to revise his text before publishing, to correct these small mistakes and avoid negative comments.
I still think it's a good job. Thanks for sharing it with us.
5 * for you.
I apologize for my English (yet), is not my native language.

to all snipers

this was not written for your critique, it was written for your enjoyment. If you get your rocks off editing others work become a volunteer but I doubt anyone would deign to use you.
SO I suggest you shut the fuck up

I'm still enjoying the story

but even more confused by the names. Jerry? Kay?

Sorry, don't mean to be critical, just seriously unable to follow the storyline without knowing who the players are.